Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc. Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng từ nối để làm rõ ý. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói về tần suất đến thư viện và lý do cụ thể một cách ngắn gọn.

例: I don't often go to the library because there is only a public library in my city. However, when I visit, I spend a lot of time reading and exploring because the building's architecture is very unique and beautiful.

提案: Bạn nên cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Sử dụng từ nối để liên kết các ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I because'. Hãy cung cấp câu trả lời mạch lạc, có chủ đề rõ ràng và chi tiết cụ thể.

例: In the library, I usually read books that interest me or help with my studies. For example, I find books about ethnic groups useful for my geography project. Also, since I like physics, I enjoy reading both science fiction and nonfiction books related to physics.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý sử dụng thì đúng (went thay vì went) và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và giải thích lý do một cách mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: I didn't go to the library much as a child because I had a large bookshelf at home. I preferred buying books so I could keep them in good condition and read whenever I wanted without going out.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không tự nhiên. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi như 'could been staying'. Hãy dùng từ nối để làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp lý do cụ thể.

例: In my opinion, Chinese kids don't often go to the library because they prefer using personal devices like phones or tablets. They usually spend time playing games or watching videos instead of reading books.

× I don't really preferably go to the library because they only want Public Library in my cities.

✓ I don't really prefer to go to the library because there is only a Public Library in my city.

The modal verb 'preferably' is incorrectly used here; 'prefer' is the correct verb to express preference. Also, 'they only want Public Library in my cities' is incorrect; it should be 'there is only a Public Library in my city' to correctly express existence and singular/plural agreement.

× Yeah, that library are gorgeous because the architectures are very special, different from everything.

✓ Yeah, that library is gorgeous because the architecture is very special, different from everything.

The subject 'library' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'architectures' is incorrect; 'architecture' is an uncountable noun and should be singular.

× For some examples, there are books about ethnicities that I could use for my geography project at school.

✓ For example, there are books about ethnicities that I could use for my geography project at school.

'For some examples' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'For example' to introduce an example.

× Or I because I like physics, so I could read a lot of science fiction about physics or nonfiction about further physic theoretical.

✓ Because I like physics, I could read a lot of science fiction about physics or nonfiction about advanced physics theories.

The sentence structure is incorrect and confusing. 'Or I because I like physics' is not proper English. It should start with 'Because I like physics,' and 'further physic theoretical' is incorrect; it should be 'advanced physics theories'.

× I've never went to a library when I was a young kid because I have a big bookshelf at home where I have plenty of books that I need.

✓ I've never gone to a library when I was a young kid because I had a big bookshelf at home where I had plenty of books that I needed.

The past participle of 'go' is 'gone', not 'went'. Also, the tense should be consistent in past tense when referring to childhood.

× And I will try to buy books that I want so that I could keep them at home in a very good condition and I could read them anytime I want, don't need to go anywhere.

✓ And I try to buy books that I want so that I can keep them at home in very good condition and read them anytime I want, without needing to go anywhere.

The use of 'will' and 'could' is inconsistent and incorrect here. 'Try' and 'can' are more appropriate to express habitual actions and ability.

× In my opinion, sadly they are not like kids that like to go to library because they could been staying for their personal device like phone, iPad, computer or television because they like games, videos or kid program.

✓ In my opinion, sadly they are not like kids who like to go to the library because they might be staying on their personal devices like phones, iPads, computers, or televisions because they like games, videos, or kids' programs.

'Kids that' should be 'kids who' for people. 'Could been staying' is incorrect; 'might be staying' is correct. 'Go to library' needs the article 'the'. 'Personal device' should be plural 'devices'. 'Kid program' should be 'kids' programs'.