Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Избегайте избыточности и старайтесь использовать связующие слова для логичности. Например, можно сказать: "Yes, I often go to the library because I find it very interesting. Moreover, reading more books helps my brain work harder."

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I find it very interesting. Moreover, reading more books helps my brain work harder.

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и понятным. Используйте связующие слова и правильные времена. Например: "Usually, I read books in the library that I have borrowed. After that, I take them home to continue reading."

例: Usually, I read books in the library that I have borrowed. After that, I take them home to continue reading.

提案: Ответ должен быть более плавным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для контраста. Например: "No, when I was a child, I thought the library and reading were boring. However, now I enjoy reading because it lifts my mood."

例: No, when I was a child, I thought the library and reading were boring. However, now I enjoy reading because it lifts my mood.

提案: Ответ должен быть более ясным и логичным. Избегайте путаницы и используйте правильные выражения. Например: "In my opinion, Chinese children visit the library more often than children from other countries. They read many books, especially about economics."

例: In my opinion, Chinese children visit the library more often than children from other countries. They read many books, especially about economics.

× Yes, as I consider, I really go to the library often because I thought that is so interesting.

✓ Yes, as I consider, I really go to the library often because I think that it is so interesting.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'thought' when referring to a current opinion. It should use the present tense 'think' to match the ongoing interest.

× And then when I waiting the more books your brain works more harder than you're right now.

✓ And then when I am waiting, the more books your brain works harder than it does right now.

The verb 'waiting' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. Also, 'more harder' is incorrect; 'harder' alone suffices.

× Usually I do in library reading books where I bought them.

✓ Usually, I read books in the library that I have bought.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and structure. The corrected sentence places the verb and objects in proper order and uses the present simple tense appropriately.

× After this I came home and they're reading these books.

✓ After this, I come home and read these books.

The sentence mixes past tense 'came' with present continuous 'they're reading'. To describe habitual actions, present simple tense 'come' and 'read' should be used.

× No, in my childhood I thought that is library or reading books is so boring, but right now it lifts my mood 'cause reading is so fantastic.

✓ No, in my childhood I thought that the library or reading books was so boring, but right now it lifts my mood because reading is so fantastic.

The sentence needs 'the' before 'library' (article error). Also, 'is' should be 'was' to match past tense 'thought'. 'Cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate.

× Yeah, from my point of view, Chinese kids often go to the library more than our children's than Casa child or Russian and that their brain is work like machine and that they are often read more books like this about economic or.

✓ Yeah, from my point of view, Chinese kids often go to the library more than our children, Casa children, or Russian children, and their brains work like machines, and they often read more books about economics.

The sentence has multiple pluralization errors: 'children's' should be 'children', 'child' should be 'children', 'brain' should be 'brains', 'work' should be 'work' (plural subject), and 'read' should be 'read' (present tense). Also, 'economic' should be 'economics' as a noun.