Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid repetition. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I usually go to the library about twice a week with my family because it is a lovely place. We often borrow our favorite books and CDs, and sometimes I meet my friends there.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Be specific about your activities in the library.

例: In the library, I mostly read books that I enjoy. Additionally, I sometimes play games available there, and I often borrow books to take home. I really love spending time there.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Use past tense consistently and provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details with linking words.

例: Actually, when I was a kid, I rarely went to the library because I was born in a small town that did not have a library. Therefore, I did not have the chance to visit one.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically, use correct grammar, and provide specific examples with linking words.

例: Nowadays, many Chinese kids often go to the library because there are many libraries available. For example, in Beijing, a big city, there are numerous libraries where children can visit regularly.

× Yes, I usually go to library about twice a week.

✓ Yes, I usually go to the library about twice a week.

The noun 'library' is a singular, countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Omitting 'the' here is incorrect.

× I with my family, very lovely, very nice library, because we can go to library, borrow some some favorite books or borrow some CDs and we can meet my friend.

✓ I go with my family to a very lovely, very nice library because we can borrow some favorite books or CDs and meet my friends.

The original sentence lacks a main verb and proper sentence structure. Adding 'go' clarifies the action. Also, 'library' needs an article, and 'some some' is a repetition error. 'Meet my friend' should be plural 'friends' if referring to more than one, and the sentence is restructured for clarity.

× because we can go to library, borrow some some favorite books or borrow some CDs and we can meet my friend.

✓ because we can go to the library, borrow some favorite books or borrow some CDs and we can meet my friends.

Again, 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'some some' is a repetition error and should be corrected to 'some'. 'My friend' is better as 'my friends' if more than one friend is meant.

× In the library were mostly reading some books that I like and make it can play some games at the library as well as we can borrow some books from the library to my home.

✓ In the library, I mostly read some books that I like and can play some games as well. We can also borrow some books from the library to take home.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'Were mostly reading' is incorrect; it should be 'I mostly read'. 'Make it can play' is ungrammatical and replaced with 'can play'. The phrase 'borrow some books from the library to my home' is corrected to 'borrow some books from the library to take home' for clarity.

× Actually, when I was a kid, I hardly go to the library because I was born in a small town and my city, I remember it's not a library as well.

✓ Actually, when I was a kid, I hardly went to the library because I was born in a small town and, in my city, I remember there was no library as well.

The verb 'go' should be in the past tense 'went' to match the past time frame. Also, 'it's not a library' is incorrect; it should be 'there was no library' to indicate absence in the past.

× Passing Chinese caves all always go to a library nowadays, because nowadays have so many library in in.

✓ Nowadays, Chinese kids always go to the library because there are so many libraries now.

The phrase 'Passing Chinese caves all always go' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; corrected to 'Chinese kids always go'. 'Nowadays have so many library in in' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'there are so many libraries now'. Also, 'library' should be plural 'libraries' when referring to many.

× For example, Beijing is a big city have so many library each year, so the kids can go to library as soon as possible.

✓ For example, Beijing is a big city that has so many libraries, so kids can go to the library as soon as possible.

'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'Beijing'. 'Library' should be plural 'libraries' when referring to many. 'Go to library' requires the definite article 'the'.