Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit lengthy and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and correct the grammar, for example, use 'the library' consistently and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words like 'because' and 'and' properly to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place where I can concentrate on my studies without distractions. Additionally, the library offers a wide range of books that I can borrow or buy at a lower price than in the market.

提案: Your answer covers the main points but has some inaccuracies and awkward phrasing, such as 'buy the things such as computer'. Libraries usually lend books rather than sell computers. Try to be more precise and use appropriate vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

例: I usually read and study in the library because it is a quiet and resourceful place. Moreover, I can conduct research easily there since it provides access to many books and online resources.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains filler words like 'uh'. Try to avoid repetition and filler words, and structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' and 'and' to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library two or three times a week when I was a kid. At school, we often visited the library to read books and learn about different topics, which helped broaden our knowledge.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and repetitive, ending abruptly. Avoid repeating the same points and ensure your answer is complete. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details. Also, check grammar and sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because it offers many resources like books and computers that help them learn and expand their knowledge. Additionally, the quiet environment is ideal for studying and doing research.

× Yes, I often go to the library because I think library is the place where I can easily concentrate on my studies because there is no distraction.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because I think the library is the place where I can easily concentrate on my studies because there is no distraction.

The noun 'library' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific library known to both speaker and listener. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect in this context.

× Moreover, library provides the ocean of knowledge where I can easily find the books which I needed them and also I can easily buy the books from the library which is more cheaper than the buying books from the market.

✓ Moreover, the library provides an ocean of knowledge where I can easily find the books which I need and also I can easily buy books from the library which are cheaper than buying books from the market.

The noun 'library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Ocean of knowledge' is an idiomatic expression and should use 'an' as it is singular and countable here. 'Books' is plural, so 'which I needed them' is incorrect; 'which I need' is correct without 'them'. 'More cheaper' is incorrect; 'cheaper' alone suffices. Also, 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'books'.

× I usually read and study in the library because I think library is the very convenient and the resourceful place where I can easily buy the things such as computer, books and many more things.

✓ I usually read and study in the library because I think the library is a very convenient and resourceful place where I can easily buy things such as computers, books and many more items.

'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Very convenient and resourceful place' requires the indefinite article 'a' because it is singular and nonspecific here. 'Computer' should be plural 'computers' to match the list. 'Things' is repeated unnecessarily; 'items' is better for variety.

× Moreover, I can easily research there because it is a very quiet and peaceful environment.

✓ Moreover, I can easily do research there because it is a very quiet and peaceful environment.

'Research' is an uncountable noun and requires a verb phrase like 'do research' rather than just 'research' as a verb in this context.

× When I was a kid, I went to the library twice or twice in a week because I remember when I was in school that time, uh, twice or thrice in a week, we went to the library and there's, uh, there are so many books which we read and also gain knowledge about the various research or the topics which enhance the knowledge and also broaden our horizon.

✓ When I was a kid, I went to the library twice or thrice a week because I remember when I was in school, we went to the library twice or thrice a week and there were so many books which we read and also gained knowledge about various research topics which enhanced our knowledge and broadened our horizons.

The phrase 'twice or twice' is redundant; 'twice or thrice' is correct. 'There's' should be 'there were' to match past tense and plural 'books'. 'Gain' should be 'gained' to match past tense. 'Enhance' should be 'enhanced' and 'broaden' should be 'broadened' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Our horizon' should be plural 'our horizons'.

× Yes, I think Chinese kids often go to the library because library provides the various resources such as the books, computers and many more resources which help the kids to gain the knowledge and also broaden their horizon.

✓ Yes, I think Chinese kids often go to the library because the library provides various resources such as books, computers and many more resources which help the kids to gain knowledge and also broaden their horizons.

'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'The various resources' should be 'various resources' without 'the' because it is general. 'The books' should be 'books' without 'the' for general plural. 'Gain the knowledge' should be 'gain knowledge' as 'knowledge' is uncountable. 'Broaden their horizon' should be plural 'horizons'.

× Moreover, the library offers a wide range of books and other materials that helps with the research. Moreover, the quiet and peaceful.

✓ Moreover, the library offers a wide range of books and other materials that help with research. Moreover, it is quiet and peaceful.

'That helps' should be 'that help' to agree with plural subject 'books and other materials'. 'With the research' should be 'with research' as 'research' is uncountable. The sentence 'Moreover, the quiet and peaceful.' is incomplete and needs a verb and subject; corrected to 'Moreover, it is quiet and peaceful.'