Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. For example, say "Yes, I often go to the library after college because I enjoy reading books."

例: Yes, I often go to the library after college because I enjoy reading books, especially novels and magazines.

提案: Make sure your sentences are grammatically correct and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I usually read books and study with my friends when I am at the library."

例: I usually read books and study with my friends when I am at the library, which helps me concentrate better.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Avoid confusing phrases and be specific. For example, "I didn't go to a public library as a child because I lived in a small village without one, but I visited my school library every Friday."

例: I didn't go to a public library as a child because I lived in a small village without one, but I visited my school library every Friday to borrow books.

提案: Use complete sentences and correct grammar. Be specific and avoid vague statements. For example, "Yes, many Chinese children often go to the library to read books after school."

例: Yes, many Chinese children often go to the library after school to read books and do their homework.

× I used to spend my my time there after the college and I really likes books the most.

✓ I used to spend my time there after college and I really like books the most.

The phrase 'my my time' contains a repeated word, which is a typographical error. 'The college' is incorrect here because 'college' is used in a general sense without a definite article. Also, 'likes' should be 'like' because the subject 'I' requires the base form of the verb in the present tense. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I used to spend my my time there after the college and I really likes books the most.

✓ I used to spend my time there after college and I really like books the most.

The verb 'likes' is incorrectly used with the subject 'I'. In English, the third person singular form of the verb adds an 's', but for 'I' the base form 'like' is used. This is a subject-verb agreement rule.

× When I'm in the library, I usually read a lot of books. I'm studying with my friends and I'm just study.

✓ When I'm in the library, I usually read a lot of books. I'm studying with my friends and I'm just studying.

The phrase 'I'm just study' is incorrect because after 'I'm' (I am), the verb should be in the present participle form '-ing'. Therefore, 'study' should be 'studying' to match the present continuous tense.

× No, I'm not because I live in a small village that there's no bribery in it.

✓ No, I didn't because I live in a small village that doesn't have a library in it.

The sentence 'No, I'm not' is incorrect as a response to a past tense question. The correct past tense negative form is 'No, I didn't'. Also, 'bribery' is a wrong word here; it should be 'library'. Additionally, 'there's no bribery' should be 'there isn't a library' or 'there's no library' to correctly express the absence of a library.

× No, I'm not because I live in a small village that there's no bribery in it.

✓ No, I didn't because I live in a small village where there is no library.

The phrase 'that there's no bribery in it' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'where there is no library' to indicate the absence of something in a place. Also, 'bribery' is a wrong word; it should be 'library'.

× But when I'm in, when I was in the elementary school, there's a library in my school, so I went there every Friday, once in a week.

✓ But when I was in elementary school, there was a library in my school, so I went there every Friday, once a week.

The phrase 'I'm in, when I was in' is confusing and incorrect; it should be 'when I was in'. 'There's' is present tense and should be 'there was' to match the past tense context. 'Once in a week' is better expressed as 'once a week'.

× Most of them always go to library.

✓ Most of them always go to the library.

The noun 'library' is countable and singular here, so it requires the definite article 'the' to specify the place. Without 'the', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I saw them every day staying in the library reading books with.

✓ I see them every day staying in the library reading books.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'with', which is incomplete and incorrect. Also, 'saw' is past tense, but the context suggests a habitual action, so 'see' (present tense) is more appropriate. Removing 'with' completes the sentence properly.