Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki penggunaan tense dan buat kalimat lebih alami serta efektif. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas untuk menghindari redundansi.

例: I used to go to the library often when I was at university to prepare for my final exams, but now I rarely go because I don't have a reason to visit.

提案: Gunakan tense yang konsisten dan perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih natural. Tambahkan detail spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran.

例: I usually do some studying or read books that interest me when I visit the library.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide dan berikan detail yang lebih spesifik.

例: Yes, I often went to the library as a child because it was a quiet and comfortable place to complete my assignments and study.

提案: Hindari penggunaan kata pengisi seperti 'Umm' dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Jelaskan pendapat dengan alasan yang lebih spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung.

例: I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library, but many parents encourage reading at home from an early age, which helps develop good reading habits.

× When I was in my university, I often go to the library to finish my final exam, but now I rarely because there is no occasion.

✓ When I was at university, I often went to the library to finish my final exam, but now I rarely go because there is no occasion.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'When I was in my university' should be 'When I was at university' for correct preposition use. 'I often go' should be 'I often went' to match the past time frame. 'Now I rarely' is incomplete and should be 'now I rarely go'. This correction ensures consistent tense and proper preposition usage.

× I usually did some work or I just read anything that I want to read.

✓ I usually did some work or I just read anything that I wanted to read.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the action is in the past ('usually did'), the relative clause should also be in past tense: 'that I wanted to read' instead of 'that I want to read'.

× Yes, of course, because I find it the library is very nice to stay, to complete assignments, to have a peace space at school.

✓ Yes, of course, because I find the library is a very nice place to stay, to complete assignments, and to have a peaceful space at school.

The phrase 'I find it the library' is incorrect; 'I find the library' is correct. 'Peace space' is incorrect; it should be 'peaceful space'. Also, 'a very nice place' is the correct expression. The preposition 'to stay' is acceptable here, but the overall sentence needed restructuring for clarity and correctness.

× Umm, I do not think so, but many parents have built the habit of reading to their kids since they were little, so I think the Chinese culture can follow that rule.

✓ Umm, I do not think so, but many parents have built the habit of reading to their kids since they were little, so I think Chinese culture follows that rule.

The phrase 'Chinese culture can follow that rule' is awkward and incorrect in this context. 'Follows' is the correct present tense verb to describe a habitual action of culture. 'The Chinese culture' is better as 'Chinese culture' without 'the' for general statements about culture.