Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'wide' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often visit my university library because it has a large collection of books. I enjoy reading there, and sometimes I borrow books to read at home.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and awkward phrasing like 'rest resting' and 'when whenever'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and clarify your routine.

例: I usually read books in the library, and sometimes I rest there between my classes because it offers a quiet environment.

提案: Your answer has tense inconsistencies and some repetition. Use past tense consistently when talking about the past and avoid repeating phrases. Also, be more specific about your preferences.

例: Yes, I often went to the school library when I was a kid. I enjoyed borrowing books, especially horror stories, because they were exciting to read.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and redundancy. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating words. Also, provide clearer reasons with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, many Chinese kids often go to the library because it provides a quiet place to read and relax.

× It is big and wide and there is wide range of books.

✓ It is big and wide and there is a wide range of books.

The phrase 'wide range of books' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'wide range' because 'range' is a singular countable noun. Omitting 'a' is incorrect in this context.

× Sometimes I borrow them. To read them in my home.

✓ Sometimes I borrow them to read at my home.

The original sentences are fragmented and disconnected. Combining them into one sentence with proper structure improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually read books in the library and sometimes also I go there for a rest resting.

✓ I usually read books in the library and sometimes I also go there to rest.

The adverb 'also' should be placed after the subject 'I' for correct adverb placement. Additionally, 'for a rest resting' is incorrect; 'to rest' is the proper infinitive form to express purpose.

× At my university there are gap between my classes, so when whenever I get time I get there.

✓ At my university there are gaps between my classes, so whenever I get time I go there.

'Gap' should be plural 'gaps' to agree with 'there are'. Also, 'between' is correct but 'when whenever' is redundant; 'whenever' alone suffices. 'Get there' is better expressed as 'go there' to indicate movement.

× When I was a kid, especially when I am in school, there was a library in our school.

✓ When I was a kid, especially when I was in school, there was a library in our school.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. Since the context is past, 'am' should be changed to 'was' to maintain tense consistency.

× I often go there.

✓ I often went there.

The context is past ('when I was a kid'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'went' instead of present 'go'.

× I often went there, visit, visit there and borrow books.

✓ I often went there, visited, and borrowed books.

The verbs 'visit' and 'borrow' should be in past tense to match 'went'. Also, 'visit there' is redundant; 'visited' suffices.

× By that time, I like the stories, horror stories, books more.

✓ By that time, I liked stories, especially horror stories, more.

'Like' should be past tense 'liked' to match 'By that time'. Also, 'the stories' is too general; 'stories' without 'the' is better. The phrase is restructured for clarity.

× The Chinese kids are often go to the library, they read books, word books.

✓ Chinese kids often go to the library; they read books, word books.

'Are often go' is incorrect; 'often go' is correct for plural subject 'kids'. Also, 'The Chinese kids' is better as 'Chinese kids' for general statement. The sentence is split for clarity.

× They went to the library to relax and relax there there.

✓ They go to the library to relax and relax there.

The sentence mixes past 'went' with present context. Since the question is about general habits, present tense 'go' is appropriate. Also, 'there there' is a repetition error.

× Sometimes they go to the library for having a quiet environment to read and relaxation.

✓ Sometimes they go to the library to have a quiet environment for reading and relaxation.

'For having' is incorrect; 'to have' is the correct infinitive form. Also, 'to read and relaxation' is inconsistent; 'for reading and relaxation' is correct.