Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, use correct verb tenses and plural forms. For example, say 'I haven't gone to the library since I graduated' and 'I buy books from online shops frequently.' This will make your answer clearer and more effective.

例: No, I haven't gone to the library since I graduated from university. Instead, I often buy books from online shops and attend a book club every month.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words, and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'prepare for the exam,' you can say 'I study with my friends because the library has many textbooks and resources that help us.' This will make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: When exams are near, I always go to the library to study with my friends because it has many textbooks and resources that help us prepare effectively.

提案: Work on grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words. Also, add linking words to connect your ideas. For example, 'I went to the library a lot because my family couldn't afford many books, so I often borrowed books to read.'

例: I went to the library a lot as a child because my family couldn't afford many books, so I often borrowed books to read.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, use plural forms correctly and be more specific. For example, say 'Yes, Chinese kids often spend time at the library because they want to read a wide range of books and prepare for their exams and classes.'

例: Yes, Chinese kids often spend time at the library because they want to read a wide range of books and prepare for their exams and classes.

× No I don't umm, I didn't go to the library since I graduated from the university.

✓ No, I haven't gone to the library since I graduated from the university.

The phrase 'since I graduated' requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Using 'didn't go' (simple past) is incorrect here because it implies a completed action in the past without connection to the present. The correct form is 'haven't gone'.

× I personally buy book from online shop frequently and umm, going to the book club uh, every month on.

✓ I personally buy books from online shops frequently and go to the book club every month.

'Book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to multiple items. 'Online shop' should be plural 'online shops' to indicate generality. Also, 'going' should be changed to 'go' to maintain parallel structure in the sentence.

× And there are so many books, textbook and resources for us to, to help us to prepare for the exam.

✓ And there are so many books, textbooks, and resources to help us prepare for the exam.

'Textbook' should be plural 'textbooks' to match 'books' and 'resources' which are plural. Also, the phrase 'for us to, to help us to prepare' is redundant; 'to help us prepare' is more concise and correct.

× I did a lot because I do remember that at that time on my family didn't have much money, uh, for me to buy a lot of books.

✓ I did a lot because I remember that at that time my family didn't have much money for me to buy a lot of books.

'Do remember' should be 'remember' to match the past context. The phrase 'at that time on my family' is incorrect; 'on' should be removed. The sentence is better without 'do' for simple past narration.

× So I frequently go to the Public Library and borrow so many books to read and.

✓ So I frequently went to the Public Library and borrowed many books to read.

Since the context is about the past ('when you were a kid'), the verbs should be in the past tense: 'went' and 'borrowed' instead of 'go' and 'borrow'. Also, 'so many' can be simplified to 'many' for better style.

× Yes, they do. Chinese kids. They like spending time at the library so much because they because they want to read a wide range of book and prepare for their exam and their class.

✓ Yes, they do. Chinese kids like spending time at the library because they want to read a wide range of books and prepare for their exams and their classes.

'Book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to multiple items. 'Exam' and 'class' should be plural 'exams' and 'classes' to match the plural subject 'kids'. Also, the repeated phrase 'because they' should be reduced to one for clarity.