Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and using more natural expressions. For example, instead of repeating 'borrow the books,' you can say 'I usually borrow books to read at home, but sometimes I read them in the library because it helps me concentrate better.' Also, avoid phrases like 'concentrate them more' which is unnatural; say 'concentrate better' instead.

例: Yes, I often go to the library when I need books that I don't have at home. I usually borrow books to read later, but sometimes I read them in the library because it helps me concentrate better.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words for coherence. For example, say 'I usually go to the library to borrow or read books. However, I often go there to work because it is quiet, so I can concentrate better.' Also, avoid 'more better' which is incorrect; use 'better' only.

例: I usually go to the library to borrow or read books. However, I often go there to work because it is quiet, so I can concentrate better.

提案: Your answer needs grammatical corrections and clearer expression. For example, say 'Yes, I went to the library quite often when I was a child because I had lots of free time to read. However, now I live in a very hectic society, so I don't have much free time to read books.' Also, avoid 'make my free time' which is unnatural; use 'find time' or 'have free time.'

例: Yes, I went to the library quite often when I was a child because I had lots of free time to read. However, now I live in a very hectic society, so I don't have much free time to read books.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs grammatical corrections and clearer linking words. For example, say 'Yes, I think many Chinese kids often go to the library, especially during free time or vacations. The library is a popular place for them to study, read books, and do homework because parents encourage good reading habits. Also, some schools organize visits to help children develop their interests.' Avoid phrases like 'doing homework' (use 'do homework') and 'lives visit' (should be 'live visits' or better 'visits').

例: Yes, I think many Chinese kids often go to the library, especially during free time or vacations. The library is a popular place for them to study, read books, and do homework because parents encourage good reading habits. Also, some schools organize visits to help children develop their interests.

× It helps me to concentrate them more.

✓ It helps me to concentrate more on them.

The verb 'concentrate' is usually followed by the preposition 'on' when indicating the object of concentration. Also, 'concentrate' is not used with a direct object without a preposition. Therefore, 'concentrate them' is incorrect; it should be 'concentrate on them'. Additionally, 'more' should be placed before the prepositional phrase for clarity.

× Usually I go to library to borrow the books or read the books.

✓ Usually I go to the library to borrow books or read books.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, when speaking generally about books, the plural noun 'books' does not need 'the' unless referring to specific books. Therefore, 'go to library' should be 'go to the library' and 'borrow the books' should be 'borrow books'.

× However, I often go to the library for my works because the library is quiet so I can concentrate more better.

✓ However, I often go to the library for my work because the library is quiet so I can concentrate better.

The word 'works' is incorrect here; 'work' is an uncountable noun when referring to tasks or activities, so 'my work' is correct. Also, 'more better' is redundant because 'better' is already a comparative form; 'more' should be removed.

× Yes, actually I went to the library quite often when I was child because I have lots of free time to reading.

✓ Yes, actually I went to the library quite often when I was a child because I had lots of free time to read.

The phrase 'when I was child' is missing the article 'a' before 'child'. Also, the verb tense should be consistent in the past; 'have' should be 'had'. The phrase 'to reading' is incorrect; after 'to' (a preposition), the base form or gerund can be used, but here 'to read' (infinitive) is correct.

× However, now I live in a very hectic society so I can not make my free time to read the books.

✓ However, now I live in a very hectic society so I cannot make free time to read books.

The phrase 'make my free time' is unnatural; 'make free time' is more appropriate. Also, 'the books' is incorrect when speaking generally; it should be 'books'. 'Cannot' is one word.

× Yes, I think many Chinese kids often go to the library, especially in free time or a vacation.

✓ Yes, I think many Chinese kids often go to the library, especially in their free time or on vacation.

The phrase 'in free time' should be 'in their free time' to specify whose free time. Also, 'a vacation' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'on vacation' without an article.

× Library is a popular place for them to study, read books and doing homework because parent encourage good reading habits.

✓ The library is a popular place for them to study, read books, and do homework because parents encourage good reading habits.

'Library' needs the definite article 'The' when referring to a specific place. 'Doing homework' should be parallel with 'study' and 'read', so 'do homework' is correct. 'Parent' should be plural 'parents' to agree with 'encourage'.

× Also some schools organize some lives visit to have children develop their interesting.

✓ Also, some schools organize live visits to help children develop their interests.

'Lives visit' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'live visits'. The phrase 'to have children develop their interesting' is incorrect; 'interesting' is an adjective, but the noun 'interests' is needed here. Also, 'help' is more appropriate than 'have' in this context.