Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 중복된 단어가 많습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 주제 문장과 추가 설명을 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books like Harry Potter. When I visit, I usually read together with my sister, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

提案: 중복된 단어와 어색한 표현이 많아 자연스럽지 않습니다. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고, 추가 설명을 연결어로 자연스럽게 이어가도록 연습하세요.

例: Usually, I read history or fantasy books in the library. Also, I like to drink coffee or tea while reading to relax.

提案: 문장이 매우 불명확하고 중복이 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 간단한 문장 구조를 사용하여 직접적으로 질문에 답하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: No, I did not go to the library as a child because I lived in a rural area and the library was far from my home. Instead, my parents bought books for me to read at home.

提案: 질문에 대한 답변을 회피하지 말고, 모르는 경우에도 자신의 생각이나 추측을 간단히 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I am not sure because I have never been to China, but I think some Chinese kids probably go to the library to study or read books.

× Yes, I like read a bit read a book like like Harry Potter.

✓ Yes, I like reading a bit, reading a book like Harry Potter.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Therefore, 'read' should be corrected to 'reading'.

× If I go to the library, I I lead my lead to my sister sister and read together.

✓ If I go to the library, I lead my sister and read together.

The sentence contains repeated words and 'lead' is used correctly as a verb here. The repetition should be removed for clarity.

× I, uh, I usually read a book in history or uh, fantasy song and I drink some drink some drink, drink like coffee or tea.

✓ I usually read books about history or fantasy, and I drink something like coffee or tea.

The phrase 'some drink some drink, drink' is repetitive and incorrect. 'Some drink' should be replaced with 'something to drink' or 'something like'. Also, 'a book in history or fantasy song' is unclear; 'books about history or fantasy' is more appropriate.

× No because I live in the rural city so the city library so far in my home say homestay so my father and mother buy buy a book to read to want to read my.

✓ No, because I lived in a rural city, so the city library was far from my home. My father and mother bought books for me to read because I wanted to read.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'lived', 'was', and 'bought' should be used instead of present tense. Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× No, I don't know because I have not been China and I don't know.

✓ No, I don't know because I have not been to China, and I don't know.

The preposition 'to' is missing after 'been' when referring to visiting a place. Also, the sentence is repeated; the second 'I don't know' is acceptable but could be combined for clarity.