Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to be more concise and correct pronoun usage. Also, avoid contradictory phrases like 'on the contrary' when comparing preferences; instead, use 'while' or 'whereas'.

例: Yes, I often go to the library at weekends with my boyfriend. He enjoys reading fiction, whereas I prefer fantasy books.

提案: Your answer is good but contains some repetition and could be more concise. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Avoid repeating words like 'weekends'.

例: I usually spend quiet time in the library, but I also enjoy chatting with the librarian, who shares interesting weekend stories and recommends books to me.

提案: Your answer has some hesitation and repetition. Try to be more fluent and clear. Also, avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, when I was about eight or nine years old, I often went to the library with my grandmother, who encouraged me to expand my vocabulary and learn more about the world.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express uncertainty more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to structure your answer logically.

例: I'm not sure if many Chinese children go to the library, but I know some Chinese neighbours who visit the library every Sunday to spend their time there.

× She also he also likes reading, especially fiction books.

✓ He also likes reading, especially fiction books.

The sentence incorrectly uses two subject pronouns 'She' and 'he' together, which is grammatically incorrect. Only one subject pronoun should be used to refer to the boyfriend, which is 'he'.

× She often shares interesting stories about her weekends weekends, which makes my visit more enjoyable, and sometimes I ask her for recommendations on which books I should read.

✓ She often shares interesting stories about her weekends, which makes my visit more enjoyable, and sometimes I ask her for recommendations on which books I should read.

The word 'weekends' is repeated twice, which is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate improves clarity and correctness.

× Well, yes, I remember that when I was around 8:00 and 9:00 years old, I used to go to the library with my grandmother.

✓ Well, yes, I remember that when I was around 8 or 9 years old, I used to go to the library with my grandmother.

The phrase '8:00 and 9:00 years old' is incorrect because time notation with colons is not used for ages. The correct form is '8 or 9 years old' to indicate approximate age.

× She always pushed me to learn more, more words, more to to to achieve my knowledge, my knowledge of the world.

✓ She always pushed me to learn more words and to achieve my knowledge of the world.

The sentence contains repeated words 'more' and 'to' unnecessarily, which makes it confusing. Simplifying the sentence by removing repetitions clarifies the meaning and improves grammar.

× Well, I thought I don't have any kind of idea if the Chinese children go to the library, but I can say that maybe they go because I know I have a Chinese neighbors and they always on Sundays they always go to the library to spend their time.

✓ Well, I don't have any idea if Chinese children go to the library, but I can say that maybe they do because I have Chinese neighbours and they always go to the library on Sundays to spend their time.

The sentence has several pronoun and article errors: 'I thought I don't have' is incorrect tense usage; 'a Chinese neighbors' mixes singular article with plural noun; 'they always on Sundays they always go' is redundant and misplaced. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.