Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ví dụ, hãy nói rõ ràng về lý do bạn thích thư viện và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it is quiet and comfortable. There are many books available, which help me improve my studies. I find it a good place to focus on my homework and exercises.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về hoạt động của bạn trong thư viện để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: I usually borrow books and study in the library because it has a wide range of interesting books that help me improve my knowledge. Moreover, the environment is quiet and comfortable, which makes it an ideal place for studying.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sắp xếp câu hợp lý, tránh dùng từ không chính xác và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về trải nghiệm của bạn khi còn nhỏ.

例: Yes, when I was a kid, I often went to the library near the English center with my parents. I enjoyed reading comic books and other interesting stories there.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, I think many Chinese kids often go to the library because they have to study hard. The exams are difficult, so the library is a good place for them to focus and improve their knowledge.

× Yes, I often go to the library to study because there are much fear here.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library to study because there is much peace here.

The phrase 'much fear' is incorrect in this context. 'Fear' is an uncountable noun but does not fit the intended meaning. Likely, the student meant a peaceful or quiet environment. Also, 'there are' should be 'there is' for uncountable nouns. Suggest using 'there is much peace here' or 'it is very quiet here.'

× Also quiet and comfortable to do the homework or exercise and also have a lot of book that we can check check and improve our study.

✓ It is also quiet and comfortable to do homework or exercise, and there are also a lot of books that we can check and use to improve our study.

The original sentence lacks proper subjects and verbs, making it a sentence structure error. Also, 'book' should be plural 'books.' The conjunction 'and also' is redundant; better to use 'and there are also.' The phrase 'check check' is likely a repetition error. The sentence needs clearer structure with subjects and verbs.

× I usually borrow books and study in the library because they have a lot of interesting book that help me to improve my knowledge and also the environment here are very convenient and comfortable.

✓ I usually borrow books and study in the library because they have a lot of interesting books that help me improve my knowledge, and also the environment here is very convenient and comfortable.

The word 'book' should be plural 'books' to agree with 'a lot of.' The verb 'help' should be 'help' (plural subject 'books' takes base verb). The phrase 'environment here are' is incorrect; 'environment' is singular, so 'is' should be used.

× Yes, because when I was a kid I was study in the English Center near next to the libraries and I usually go there to with my parents and read like comic books and a lot of interesting man girl like that.

✓ Yes, because when I was a kid I studied at the English Center near the libraries, and I usually went there with my parents to read comic books and many other interesting things like that.

The phrase 'I was study' is incorrect; it should be past tense 'I studied.' 'Near next to' is redundant; use 'near' or 'next to.' 'I usually go' should be past tense 'I usually went' to match the past context. The phrase 'like comic books and a lot of interesting man girl like that' is unclear; 'many other interesting things' is clearer.

× I usually go there to with my parents and read like comic books and a lot of interesting man girl like that.

✓ I usually went there with my parents to read comic books and many other interesting things like that.

The phrase 'to with my parents' is incorrect; 'to' is unnecessary before 'with my parents.' Also, 'man girl' is unclear and likely incorrect; it should be replaced with 'many other interesting things.'

× I think that yes because in Chinese there are have to study a lot and also that the exam are so difficult so they all also often go to the library to study and like improve their knowledge.

✓ I think yes because in China, students have to study a lot, and the exams are very difficult, so they often go to the library to study and improve their knowledge.

The phrase 'there are have to study a lot' is incorrect; 'students have to study a lot' is correct. 'Exam are' should be 'exams are' (plural). 'They all also often' is redundant; 'they often' suffices. 'Like improve' is incorrect; 'to improve' or just 'improve' is correct.