Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and correcting grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I am preparing for the IELTS exam. It provides a quiet and comfortable environment where I can focus on reading and writing without distractions.

提案: Your answer lacks coherence and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating the same information. Also, try to be more specific about your activities in the library.

例: At home, I often get disturbed while studying, so I prefer going to the library. There, the quiet and relaxing atmosphere helps me concentrate better on my exam preparation.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and making sentences more natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing.

例: No, I didn't go to the library as a child. Instead, I preferred reading in my room with my parents' help, and sometimes I studied together with my friends.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your uncertainty more naturally and provide a clearer comparison. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I'm not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library because I am from Nepal. However, in Nepal, many areas lack good library facilities, so children usually prefer studying at home.

× And while reading in the library it may feels relaxing and comfortable without disturbing of the others.

✓ And while reading in the library, it may feel relaxing and comfortable without disturbing others.

The verb 'feels' should be 'feel' because 'may' is a modal verb and is followed by the base form of the verb. Also, 'disturbing of the others' is incorrect; it should be 'disturbing others' without 'of the'.

× In home, I feel so disturbance while I'm preparing for my exams.

✓ At home, I feel so disturbed while I'm preparing for my exams.

The correct preposition is 'at' when referring to being at home. Also, 'disturbance' is a noun; the adjective 'disturbed' fits better to describe the feeling.

× When I go to the library I feel so quiet and a relaxing environment for the reading purpose.

✓ When I go to the library, I feel it is so quiet and there is a relaxing environment for reading purposes.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I feel so quiet' which implies the speaker is quiet; it should express the environment's quietness. Also, 'a relaxing environment' needs a verb to connect it properly. 'For the reading purpose' should be 'for reading purposes'.

× And when I go to library I do preparation for my examinations.

✓ And when I go to the library, I prepare for my examinations.

'Do preparation' is awkward; 'prepare' is more natural. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× No, I didn't go to the library when I was kid.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid.

The phrase 'was kid' is missing the article 'a' before 'kid'.

× I prefer to read in my own room with the help of my parents preparing for the examination and also I try to do combine study with my friend when I was a child.

✓ I preferred to read in my own room with the help of my parents while preparing for the examination, and I also tried to study with my friend when I was a child.

The sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect prepositions. 'Prefer' should be past tense 'preferred' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Do combine study' is incorrect; 'study together' or 'study with' is better. Also, 'with my friend' should be plural if more than one friend or singular if one friend; here singular is fine.

× I don't know about the Chinese kids whether often go to the library or not as I'm Nepali.

✓ I don't know whether Chinese kids often go to the library or not, as I'm Nepali.

The phrase 'about the Chinese kids whether often go' is awkward. It should be 'whether Chinese kids often go'. Also, 'the' before 'Chinese kids' is unnecessary here.

× In the context of Nepali Nepal, there are so many places which are still backward of the library facilities and they all prefer to read in home rather than to go to the library.

✓ In the context of Nepal, there are many places which still lack library facilities, and people there prefer to read at home rather than go to the library.

'Backward of the library facilities' is incorrect; 'lack library facilities' is better. 'Read in home' should be 'read at home'. Also, 'Nepali Nepal' is redundant; 'Nepal' suffices.