Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Actually, I don't go to the library often because my home is quite far from the main library in the city. Moreover, it's sometimes difficult to find parking there. Therefore, I prefer studying at home where it's more convenient and comfortable.

提案: Focus on answering directly and clearly. Avoid unnecessary words and repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific details.

例: I usually go to the library to print documents such as my resume and application letters. This is because printing there is quite affordable compared to other places.

提案: Try to organise your answer with clear sentences and avoid hesitation. Use linking words to explain reasons and provide a complete response within 5 sentences.

例: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because my school didn't have one. The library was only accessible to teachers and staff members, so students like me couldn't use it.

提案: Improve your grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to contrast different situations clearly and provide specific examples.

例: It depends on where Chinese children live. In big cities, there are newly built large libraries with special areas for children to read and play. However, in smaller towns and rural areas, libraries are often unavailable.

× I prefer study at home and since my my home is far away from the major library in our city and sometimes it's hard to find a parking lot, so I prefer study at home.

✓ I prefer studying at home and since my home is far away from the major library in our city and sometimes it's hard to find a parking lot, so I prefer studying at home.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by the gerund form (verb + -ing), so 'study' should be corrected to 'studying'. This is a common structure in English when expressing preferences.

× so I prefer study at home.

✓ so I prefer studying at home.

Same as above, 'prefer' requires the gerund form 'studying' instead of the base verb 'study'.

× Where I usually go to library to print some stuff like my resume or some application letters because it's very cheap to to print up A4 paper in the library.

✓ I usually go to the library to print some stuff like my resume or some application letters because it's very cheap to print A4 paper in the library.

The sentence has incorrect word order and redundancy ('to to print up'). The phrase 'Where I usually go to library' is incorrect; it should be 'I usually go to the library'. Also, 'print up' is unnecessary; 'print' suffices.

× Where I usually go to library to print some stuff like my resume or some application letters because it's very cheap to to print up A4 paper in the library.

✓ I usually go to the library to print some stuff like my resume or some application letters because it's very cheap to print A4 paper in the library.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Missing 'the' before 'library' is an article error.

× No, I was a kid, I was schooled just didn't have a library.

✓ No, when I was a kid, I was schooled but we didn't have a library.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'but' to connect the clauses properly. Also, 'just didn't have a library' is incomplete; adding 'we' clarifies the subject. The past tense 'was' and 'didn't have' are correct.

× No, I was a kid, I was schooled just didn't have a library.

✓ No, when I was a kid, I was schooled but we didn't have a library.

The pronoun 'we' is needed to indicate who didn't have a library. Using 'I' alone is unclear in this context.

× And it's not open to students. It's only open to the the teachers, staff members.

✓ And it wasn't open to students. It was only open to the teachers and staff members.

The tense should be past ('wasn't' and 'was') to match the time frame of being a kid. Also, 'the the' is a typo and should be corrected to a single 'the'. The conjunction 'and' is needed between 'teachers' and 'staff members'.

× Yeah. So I, I really didn't get a chance to go to the school library and.

✓ Yeah. So, I really didn't get a chance to go to the school library.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' which is incomplete. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× But in most of the small cities and rural areas there is just no.

✓ But in most small cities and rural areas, there are just none.

The phrase 'there is just no' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Since 'small cities and rural areas' is plural, 'there are' should be used. Also, 'none' is clearer to indicate absence of libraries.