Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, "the atmosphere of the library is the best place to reading books" should be "the library has the best atmosphere for reading books." Also, avoid repeating ideas like "I love reading books" and "this is the cheapest way to read a lot of books" without linking them smoothly. Try to use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect your ideas naturally.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I love reading books, and the library has the best atmosphere for reading. It is very quiet, which helps me concentrate, and it is also an affordable way to access many books.

提案: Your answer has repetition and some unclear phrases. For example, "Usually I just usually I just" is repeated, and "Pride and Project" might be a mispronunciation or incorrect title. Also, saying "which is my favorite book I wrote" is confusing. Try to avoid repetition, clarify your ideas, and use linking words like "but" or "so" to make your answer coherent.

例: Usually, I sit down and read my own books. However, if I don't have anything to read, I choose a romance novel from the shelf, such as "Pride and Prejudice," which is one of my favorite books that I have read many times.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some grammatical mistakes and redundancy. For example, "the schools library" should be "the school's library," and repeating "I read all of the books" twice is unnecessary. Also, use linking words like "but" and "so" to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Actually, the public library was not accessible to me when I was a kid, but when I started school, I used the school's library. I read many books there because I loved the library even as a child.

提案: Your answer is vague and contains hesitations and grammatical errors. For example, "that makes them to read" should be "that makes them want to read." Try to avoid filler words like "some things" and repeated words like "they are, they are." Also, give a more direct answer and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Although I am not very familiar with Chinese culture, I believe that many Chinese children often go to the library because they are curious and enjoy reading. However, I am not certain about this.

× the atmosphere of the library is the best place to reading books

✓ the atmosphere of the library is the best place to read books

After 'to' as a preposition, the verb should be in its base form, not the '-ing' form. 'To reading' is incorrect; it should be 'to read'. This is a common mistake involving verb forms after prepositions.

× I go to the shelf and grab some kind of romance that I love

✓ I go to the shelves and grab some kind of romance novel that I love

The word 'shelf' should be plural 'shelves' when referring to multiple shelves in a library. Also, 'romance' alone is vague; 'romance novel' is more precise. This improves clarity and correctness in prepositional and noun usage.

× like Pride and Project, which is my favorite book I wrote

✓ like Pride and Prejudice, which is my favorite book I have read

The student likely meant 'Pride and Prejudice' (a book title) and not 'Project'. Also, 'I wrote' is incorrect because the student is not the author; 'I have read' is appropriate. This corrects pronoun and verb usage.

× I read it 400 times

✓ I have read it 400 times

Since the action of reading the book multiple times is relevant to the present, the present perfect tense 'have read' is more appropriate than simple past 'read'. This tense indicates experience up to now.

× when I went to the school I used the schools library

✓ when I went to school I used the school's library

The phrase 'went to school' does not require 'the' before 'school' when referring to attending school generally. Also, 'schools library' needs an apostrophe to show possession: 'school's library'.

× I read all of the books

✓ I read all the books

While 'all of the books' is not incorrect, 'all the books' is more natural and concise in this context. This is a minor stylistic improvement related to quantifier usage.

× I loved library as a kid too

✓ I loved the library as a kid too

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× that makes them to read

✓ that makes them read

After the verb 'make', the following verb should be in the base form without 'to'. 'Makes them to read' is incorrect; it should be 'makes them read'.