Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "I don't often go" and "because the library is always crowded" which could be combined more smoothly. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I don't often go to the library because it's usually crowded, so I prefer studying alone in my dormitory, which I find more effective.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "land some books" instead of "borrow some books" and fragmented sentences. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and correct the grammar.

例: I usually borrow some books from the library and find a quiet spot to read. If I'm particularly busy, I also conduct my own research there and look for additional materials.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating similar ideas and try to use linking words to improve flow.

例: I didn't go to the library as a child because my parents believed studying at home was sufficient.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains fragmented sentences. Try to combine your ideas into a single coherent sentence using linking words, and use more precise vocabulary.

例: Yes, Chinese children often visit the library because their parents believe it helps them develop concentration and cultivate a reading habit.

× I love to stay in my dormitory and learn by myself.

✓ I love staying in my dormitory and learning by myself.

After verbs like 'love', the gerund form (-ing) is commonly used to express habitual actions or preferences. Using 'to stay' and 'learn' here is less natural than 'staying' and 'learning'.

× I usually land some books from the library and find a place to sit down and read by myself.

✓ I usually borrow some books from the library and find a place to sit down and read by myself.

The verb 'land' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'borrow' when taking books from a library. This is a vocabulary choice rather than a grammar problem, but it affects clarity.

× If I'm particularly busy.

✓ If I'm particularly busy,

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause. 'If' clauses need a main clause to complete the sentence. The sentence should be connected to the following clause or completed properly.

× I also do some my own study research in the library and I search for some materials in library too.

✓ I also do some of my own study research in the library and I search for some materials in the library too.

The phrase 'some my own' is incorrect; it should be 'some of my own'. Also, 'in library' is missing the article 'the'.

× I search for some materials in library too.

✓ I search for some materials in the library too.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Omitting 'the' is incorrect here.

× my parents didn't find it very necessary for a child to go to the library to do the study, which could be completed totally at home.

✓ my parents didn't find it very necessary for a child to go to the library to study, which could be completed totally at home.

The phrase 'to do the study' is awkward; 'to study' is the correct infinitive form to express the action. 'Do the study' is not idiomatic in this context.

× Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because their parents think that it's a good way for them to focus. Learn to focus, and try to get into the habit of reading concentration.

✓ Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because their parents think that it's a good way for them to focus, learn to concentrate, and try to get into the habit of reading regularly.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Learn to focus' is separated incorrectly, and 'reading concentration' is not a correct phrase. The corrected sentence combines ideas properly and uses appropriate expressions.