List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は明確ですが、文法ミスと冗長さがあります。まず主文を簡潔にしてから、理由をつなげるための接続語（because, so, thereforeなど）を使ってください。また、'want to buy what I need it for one time' の表現は不自然なので、より自然な表現（for one trip / in one goなど）に直しましょう。発音や流暢さを上げるために短い文を2〜3文でまとめる練習をしてください。

例: Yes, I do. I always make a list because I often forget items. This helps me buy everything I need in one trip.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが、文法と一貫性が弱いです。現在形の三人称単数や動詞の一致（it work → it works）、繰り返し語（I'm I'm）を直してください。また、理由を述べるときは接続語（however, but, because）を使って論理的に繋げましょう。具体的な改善行動（例：リストの優先順位付けや時間割を作る）を示すとより説得力が増します。

例: Yes, I do. I usually make lists for my studies, but they don't always work because I tend to be lazy. To improve, I try to prioritize tasks and set short study sessions.

提案: 考えは良いですが、語順や語法の間違いが目立ちます。'it's kinda time consuming thing' は冗長なので 'it's time-consuming' と言い、'buy and shopping without risk' は意味が不明瞭です。代わりに 'they prefer spontaneity' や 'they find it unnecessary' などの具体的な理由を挙げてください。接続語（for example, because, or）を適切に使い、文を2文以内に収めてください。

例: I think some people dislike lists because making them takes time. They prefer to shop spontaneously and feel it's unnecessary.

提案: 答えは明確ですが、文の途中で終わっており、最後の表現が不完全です。'depends on time' は曖昧なので 'depends on the situation' や 'depends on whether I have my phone' に言い換えましょう。理由を述べる際は完全な文を使い、具体的な利点（easy to edit, always with meなど）を挙げてください。自然な繋ぎ方としてalthough/howeverも使えます。

例: It depends on the situation, but I usually prefer making lists on my phone when I shop. It's more convenient because I can edit it easily and always have my phone with me.

× I sometimes forget what I want to buy and also I want to buy what I need it for one time.

✓ I sometimes forget what I want to buy, and I also want to buy what I need at one time.

The sentence contains an unnecessary pronoun 'it' and an awkward phrase 'for one time'. Remove 'it' because it redundantly refers to the object and is grammatically incorrect here. Replace 'for one time' with 'at one time' to express buying everything in a single trip. Also add a comma before 'and' to join the coordinated clauses clearly.

× But I don't think it work because I'm I'm a kind of lazy person.

✓ But I don't think it works because I'm kind of a lazy person.

The verb must agree with the singular subject 'it' so use 'works' (third person singular). Remove the duplicated 'I'm'. Use the idiomatic order 'kind of a lazy person' or 'a kind of lazy person' — here 'kind of a lazy person' sounds natural.

× So I make a list but I don't study for a list.

✓ So I make a list, but I don't study using the list.

The phrase 'study for a list' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with 'study using the list' to show the intended meaning: the speaker makes lists but does not use them to study. Add a comma before 'but' to join independent clauses.

× It's a difficult question, I guess some people don't like making lists because it's it's kinda time consuming thing and maybe they can buy and shopping without risk.

✓ It's a difficult question. I guess some people don't like making lists because it's kind of a time-consuming thing, and maybe they can shop without risk.

Several issues: split into two sentences for clarity. 'kinda' is informal; use 'kind of'. 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective. 'buy and shopping' is incorrect; use the verb 'shop' to mean 'go shopping'. Remove the duplicated 'it's'.

× Uh, it depends on time, but when I go shopping to the supermarket, I prefer to make a list on my phone. I think it's more convenient using my phone because I can see the mobile phone when I.

✓ Uh, it depends on the time, but when I go shopping at the supermarket, I prefer to make a list on my phone. I think it's more convenient to use my phone because I can see it when I need to.

Use 'the time' for specific contexts. 'go shopping to the supermarket' is better as 'go shopping at the supermarket'. 'more convenient using my phone' should be 'more convenient to use my phone'. The clause 'I can see the mobile phone when I' is incomplete — complete it as 'I can see it when I need to'. Replace 'the mobile phone' with 'it' to avoid repetition.