List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly unclear in places. Try to make your sentences more concise and structured, for example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me remember what I need. This way, I avoid buying unnecessary items and save time.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain the benefits of making lists for work. Also, be careful with sentence structure and word choice to improve clarity.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because I often forget tasks. Since I started using lists, I have been more organised and can complete my work more efficiently.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons, using linking words like 'because' or 'however'. Avoid filler words and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming and prefer to be spontaneous. Additionally, not everyone enjoys organising their tasks in detail.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but contains some hesitations and informal fillers like 'uh'. Try to speak more fluently and confidently, and use linking words smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas unnecessarily.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always have it with me, unlike paper notes which I often forget. This makes it easier to check my list anytime.

× I make a list when I shop because when I do that I feel that it makes my life so much easier and I realize what I need at home or for myself and it made very difference compared to none to do it.

✓ I make a list when I shop because when I do that I feel that it makes my life so much easier and I realise what I need at home or for myself and it makes a big difference compared to not doing it.

The phrase 'it made very difference' is incorrect because the past tense 'made' does not fit the present context of the sentence. Also, 'very difference' is ungrammatical; the correct phrase is 'a big difference'. Additionally, 'none to do it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'not doing it'. The sentence should use present tense 'makes' to match the ongoing habit described.

× I make a list for my work because sometimes I forget some something and I realize that after I do that and it's really made a big difference and I replace my what I forgot.

✓ I make a list for my work because sometimes I forget something and I realise that after I do that it's really made a big difference and I replace what I forgot.

The phrase 'some something' is incorrect; 'something' alone is sufficient. Also, 'my what I forgot' is ungrammatical; it should be 'what I forgot'. The pronouns and determiners need to be used correctly to maintain clarity and grammaticality.

× People, because people have different personalities, some people, they don't want to be organized and making lists, it's not an easy task.

✓ People have different personalities; some don't want to be organised, and making lists is not an easy task.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses commas incorrectly to join independent clauses. Proper conjunctions or punctuation (semicolon) should be used to connect ideas clearly. Also, 'they don't want to be organized and making lists' is awkward; it should be 'some don't want to be organised, and making lists is not an easy task.'

× So I don't think it may not work on all of the people.

✓ So I don't think it will work for all people.

The phrase 'I don't think it may not work' contains a double negative, which is confusing. It should be 'I don't think it will work'. Also, 'on all of the people' is better expressed as 'for all people'.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because, uh, I can take my phone with me everywhere, but I tend to forget, uh, papers.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because I can take my phone with me everywhere, but I tend to forget papers.

The phrase 'forget papers' is acceptable but could be clearer as 'forget to bring papers' or 'forget paper lists'. However, the sentence is acceptable as is. No preposition error detected here, so no correction needed.

× So for me, it's better to take note on phone that I can have with me all the time.

✓ So for me, it's better to take notes on my phone that I can have with me all the time.

The phrase 'take note on phone' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'take notes on my phone'. 'Note' should be plural 'notes' because it refers to multiple items, and 'my phone' is the correct possessive form.