List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains unnecessary phrases like "By myself. With myself I mean," which make it less natural and a bit confusing. Try to keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by using linking words.

例: Yes, I usually write down the items I need on a shopping list and bring it with me. This helps me stay organized and ensures I don't forget anything while shopping.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has minor grammatical errors and could be more fluent. For example, "in my desk" should be "on my desk." Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repetition like "every simple thing."

例: Yes, I keep a small to-do list on my desk at work. I write down all the tasks I need to complete, and it has definitely helped me manage my day more efficiently.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and filler words like "uh" and "in conclusion" which are unnecessary here. Also, the sentence structure is awkward. Try to use correct subject-verb agreement and avoid fillers to sound more natural.

例: Some people might not like making lists because they believe it's unnecessary and that they can remember their tasks without writing them down.

提案: Your answer has many filler words like "uh" and "I mean," which disrupt the flow and make it less natural. Also, the sentence is quite long and confusing. Try to be more concise and clear, using linking words to explain your preference logically.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because it's easier to write quickly. However, since carrying paper everywhere can be inconvenient, I usually use my phone to make lists when I'm out.

× By myself. With myself I mean.

✓ By myself, I mean.

The phrase 'With myself I mean' is incorrect because 'with' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence structure. The correct expression is 'By myself, I mean,' which clarifies the meaning without extra prepositions.

× And this helped me organize and not forget anything in shopping.

✓ And this helps me organize and not forget anything when shopping.

The sentence uses past tense 'helped' inconsistently with the present context. Since the student is describing a habitual action, present tense 'helps' is appropriate. Also, 'in shopping' is incorrect; 'when shopping' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Yes, I have a a small To Do List in my desk at work.

✓ Yes, I have a small To Do List on my desk at work.

There is a repeated article 'a a' which is incorrect. Also, the correct preposition for location on a desk is 'on' not 'in'. Therefore, the corrected sentence removes the duplicate article and uses 'on'.

× I write down every simple thing that I want to do and it obviously helped me a lot in my day.

✓ I write down every simple thing that I want to do and it obviously helps me a lot in my day.

The sentence mixes present tense 'write' with past tense 'helped'. Since the action is habitual, present tense 'helps' should be used for consistency.

× Well, I suppose they may think it is not necessary for them and they could remember the things they wanted to do in a day and uh, in conclusion, they think they doesn't need it.

✓ Well, I suppose they may think it is not necessary for them and they could remember the things they want to do in a day and, in conclusion, they think they don't need it.

The sentence has pronoun-verb agreement errors: 'they doesn't' should be 'they don't' because 'they' requires plural verb form. Also, 'wanted' should be 'want' to maintain present tense consistency.