List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar, for example, say 'sometimes' instead of 'sometime' and 'things I want to buy' instead of 'things I want to take it from the shop'. Keep your answer concise and clear.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because sometimes it's hard to remember everything I need to buy, so the list helps me avoid forgetting anything.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, explain when you make lists and why they help you. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like 'I do less for it'.

例: Yes, I sometimes make lists for work, especially when I have many tasks. This helps me stay organised and ensures I don't forget important duties, which makes me feel more relaxed.

提案: Focus on clearer grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, explain the reason and effect clearly, and avoid double negatives like 'can cannot'. Also, use correct verb forms such as 'making lists' instead of 'to not making lists'.

例: Some people dislike making lists because if they can't complete all tasks, it makes them feel stressed and depressed. I feel the same, so sometimes I prefer not to make lists to avoid these feelings.

提案: Try to improve sentence flow and grammar. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast past and present habits. Also, say 'set an alarm' instead of 'put it as a alarm' and 'remind me' instead of 'Remember Me'.

例: I used to make lists on paper, which took a lot of time. However, now I prefer using my iPhone or iPad to create lists and set alarms to remind me to complete tasks later.

× Yes, I make a list when I go to shop, umm, because sometime it's difficult to remember all things I want to uh, take it from the shop, so it will be easy to me to make a list to not forget.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I go shopping, umm, because sometimes it's difficult to remember all the things I want to uh, take from the shop, so it will be easy for me to make a list to not forget.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency (plural). 'Go to shop' should be 'go shopping' as the verb form is needed here. 'All things' should be 'all the things' to specify the items. 'Easy to me' should be 'easy for me' as the correct preposition is 'for' in this context.

× Yes, I make a list when I go to shop, umm, because sometime it's difficult to remember all things I want to uh, take it from the shop, so it will be easy to me to make a list to not forget.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I go shopping, umm, because sometimes it's difficult to remember all the things I want to uh, take from the shop, so it will be easy for me to make a list to not forget.

The phrase 'go to shop' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping'. Also, 'easy to me' should be 'easy for me' because 'for' is the appropriate preposition to indicate benefit or advantage.

× Some people don't like making lists because they can cannot complete everything unless this make them feel more depressed and stress.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because they cannot complete everything and this makes them feel more depressed and stressed.

The phrase 'can cannot' is incorrect; it should be 'cannot'. 'Unless this make' is incorrect; it should be 'and this makes' to connect the ideas properly. 'Stress' should be 'stressed' to correctly use the adjective form describing feelings.

× Some people don't like making lists because they can cannot complete everything unless this make them feel more depressed and stress.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because they cannot complete everything and this makes them feel more depressed and stressed.

The conjunction 'unless' is incorrectly used here; 'and' is appropriate to link the two clauses. Also, 'make them feel more depressed and stress' should be 'makes them feel more depressed and stressed' to agree with the singular subject and use the correct adjective form.

× Before I used to make a list on paper, this was taking a lot of time, but now I prefer to make my list on my iPhone or on my iPad and put it as a alarm in my phone to Remember Me to do it later.

✓ Before, I used to make a list on paper; this used to take a lot of time, but now I prefer to make my list on my iPhone or my iPad and set an alarm on my phone to remind me to do it later.

The phrase 'put it as a alarm' is incorrect; it should be 'set an alarm'. 'Remember Me' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'remind me'. Also, 'was taking a lot of time' is better expressed as 'used to take a lot of time' to indicate past habitual action.