List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: သင်၏အဖြေသည် သဘာဝကျပြီး ထိရောက်မှုရှိစေရန် စကားလုံးများကို ပိုမိုတိကျစွာ အသုံးပြုရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ ဥပမာအားဖြင့် "make it easier to recognize the thing that I need" ကို "help me remember what I need to buy" ဟု ပြောင်းလဲ၍ ပိုမိုသဘာဝကျစေပါ။ ထို့အပြင် စကားလုံးများအကြောင်းအရာနှင့် သက်ဆိုင်မှုရှိစေရန် ဥပမာများ ထည့်သွင်းပါ။

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me remember what I need to buy. This way, I feel more organized and I don't forget anything important. For example, last week I bought all the ingredients for a recipe without missing anything.

提案: အဖြေတွင် ပိုမိုတိကျသော စကားလုံးများနှင့် သဘာဝကျသော စကားပြောပုံကို အသုံးပြုရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ "I did it for my study plan" ကို "I make a study plan instead" ဟု ပြောင်းလဲ၍ ပိုမိုသဘာဝကျစေပါ။ ထို့အပြင် ဆက်စပ်သော အကြောင်းအရာများကို ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းစွာ ဖော်ပြပါ။

例: Honestly, I don't usually make a list for my work, but I do make a study plan. Every weekend, I set a timetable for the upcoming week. This helps me stay organized and study more effectively.

提案: အဖြေတွင် သဘာဝကျသော စကားလုံးများနှင့် သက်ဆိုင်သော သဒ္ဒါများကို အသုံးပြုရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ "And my perspective" ကို "In my opinion" ဟု ပြောင်းလဲ၍ ပိုမိုသဘာဝကျစေပါ။ ထို့အပြင် စကားလုံးများကို ပိုမိုတိကျစွာ အသုံးပြု၍ အကြောင်းအရာကို ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းစေပါ။

例: In my opinion, some people don't like making lists because they are unaware of the benefits. I used to be lazy to make lists too, but after I made it a habit, I became more organized and had more free time.

提案: အဖြေတွင် ပိုမိုသဘာဝကျသော စကားလုံးများနှင့် သက်ဆိုင်သော စကားပြောပုံကို အသုံးပြုရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ "writing journey on a paper" ကို "writing on paper" ဟု ပြောင်းလဲ၍ ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းစေပါ။ ထို့အပြင် အကြောင်းပြချက်များကို ပိုမိုတိကျစွာ ဖော်ပြပါ။

例: Honestly, I prefer to make lists on my phone because I always carry it with me. However, I also like writing on paper sometimes because it helps me feel more connected to my tasks.

× because it make it easier to recognize the thing that I need

✓ because it makes it easier to recognize the things that I need

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it' (third person singular). Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple items needed. This is a subject-verb agreement and singular/plural noun issue.

× I feel like more organized so I don't forget something to buy

✓ I feel more organized so I don't forget anything to buy

The phrase 'feel like more organized' is incorrect; it should be 'feel more organized'. Also, 'something to buy' is vague; 'anything to buy' fits better in negative sentences. This is an issue with quantifiers and adjective usage.

× I did it for my study plan

✓ I have done it for my study plan

The sentence refers to a past action with present relevance, so present perfect 'have done' is more appropriate than simple past 'did'. This is a tense usage issue.

× This helped me to study more uh because of I become more organized

✓ This helped me to study more because I became more organized

The verb 'become' should be in past tense 'became' to match the past tense 'helped'. Also, 'because of I become' is incorrect; it should be 'because I became'. This is a past tense and sentence structure issue.

× And my perspective, some people don't like making a list because they don't know the benefits of it

✓ In my perspective, some people don't like making a list because they don't know its benefits

The phrase 'And my perspective' is incorrect; it should be 'In my perspective'. Also, 'the benefits of it' is better expressed as 'its benefits'. This is a preposition and pronoun usage issue.

× Before I was noticed it's advantage I was so lazy to make a list

✓ Before I noticed its advantages, I was so lazy to make a list

'I was noticed' is passive and incorrect here; it should be active 'I noticed'. Also, 'it's advantage' should be 'its advantages'. This is a past tense and pronoun usage issue.

× But after I keep this as a habit I become more organized and have more time even I have

✓ But after I kept this as a habit, I became more organized and had more time even when I had it

The verbs should be in past tense 'kept', 'became', 'had' to maintain consistency. The phrase 'even I have' is incomplete and corrected to 'even when I had it'. This is a tense and sentence structure issue.

× Honestly, I prefer to make a list on my phones because as this gadget is the only thing I take in whatever I go

✓ Honestly, I prefer to make a list on my phone because this gadget is the only thing I take wherever I go

'Phones' should be singular 'phone' as usually one phone is used. The phrase 'as this gadget is' is unnecessary and awkward; 'because this gadget is' is better. 'Take in whatever I go' should be 'take wherever I go'. This is a singular/plural and preposition usage issue.

× but I prefer a writing journey on a paper because I feel more connected with the paper

✓ but I prefer writing on paper because I feel more connected with it

'A writing journey' is incorrect; it should be 'writing'. Also, 'on a paper' should be 'on paper'. 'Connected with the paper' can be simplified to 'connected with it'. This is an article and noun usage issue.