List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้ภาษาอังกฤษที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำที่ไม่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'cover products' ควรใช้ 'choose products' หรือ 'look at products' นอกจากนี้ ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้กระชับและชัดเจน เช่น การใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างมีเหตุผล

例: No, I usually don't make a list when I shop because I enjoy browsing and discovering new products spontaneously. For example, when I shop alone, I can take my time to explore different options without feeling rushed, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

提案: คำตอบนี้ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'sometime' ควรเป็น 'sometimes' และ 'focuses' ควรเป็น 'focused' นอกจากนี้ ควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงประโยคให้ลื่นไหล และเพิ่มความชัดเจนในเนื้อหา

例: Yes, sometimes I make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized and focused. For example, by prioritizing tasks according to their importance, I can manage my time more efficiently and avoid forgetting important duties. This definitely improves my productivity and reduces stress.

提案: คำตอบนี้มีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์หลายจุด เช่น 'find stressful' ควรเป็น 'find it stressful' และประโยคสุดท้ายไม่ชัดเจน ควรใช้คำที่เหมาะสมและชัดเจนมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด

例: In my opinion, some people don't like making lists because they find it stressful and restrictive. For example, they might feel pressured to complete everything on the list, which can be overwhelming. Also, some people prefer to be more spontaneous rather than planning everything in advance.

提案: คำตอบนี้ควรแก้ไขคำผิด เช่น 'make a lid' ควรเป็น 'make a list' และปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์ เช่น 'it feel' เป็น 'it feels' รวมถึงปรับประโยคให้ชัดเจนและลื่นไหลมากขึ้นโดยใช้ linking words

例: I prefer to make a list on paper because it feels more tangible and easier to recognize. When I write things down by hand, I can quickly see everything at once, which helps me remember better. Also, using paper doesn't depend on battery life, so it's more reliable, especially when my phone runs out of power.

× which makes the appearance more enjoyable overall shopping

✓ which makes the experience more enjoyable overall when shopping

The word 'appearance' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is 'experience'. Also, 'overall shopping' is awkward; it should be 'overall when shopping' to clarify the meaning.

× Yes, sometime I make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized and focuses.

✓ Yes, sometimes I make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized and focus.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'focuses' should be 'focus' to agree with the subject 'I' and maintain parallel structure with 'stay organized'.

× So that make it a little definitely improve my productivity and reduce.

✓ So that definitely helps improve my productivity and reduce mistakes.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear subject and verb. Adding 'helps' clarifies the action, and completing the sentence with 'reduce mistakes' makes the meaning clear.

× some people don't like making lists because they find stressful and restrictive.

✓ some people don't like making lists because they find them stressful and restrictive.

The pronoun 'them' is needed to refer back to 'lists'. Without it, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× Also, some people prefer to become sporty net greater than planning everything in advance.

✓ Also, some people prefer to be spontaneous rather than planning everything in advance.

The phrase 'become sporty net greater than' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'prefer to be spontaneous rather than' to convey the intended meaning.

× For me, I prefer to make a lid on paper because it feel more tangible and easier to recognise.

✓ For me, I prefer to make a list on paper because it feels more tangible and easier to recognise.

The word 'lid' is a typo and should be 'list'. Also, 'feel' should be 'feels' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× When I write things down by hand I can quickly see everything at once and it help me remember better.

✓ When I write things down by hand I can quickly see everything at once and it helps me remember better.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Also using paper does it depend on battery life so that if more reliable especially when the phone is basically run out?

✓ Also, using paper does not depend on battery life, so it is more reliable, especially when the phone is basically out of battery.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Reordering and adding missing words clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.