List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较长且有语法不完整的问题，建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免句子未完成。可以使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list on my phone because I like to plan ahead. This helps me remember exactly what I need to buy and saves time.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，建议使用完整句子并增加具体细节，使用连接词使内容连贯。

例: Yes, I make a daily work list because it helps me organize my tasks and ensures I don't forget important duties. It also allows me to manage my time effectively.

提案: 回答中有重复和犹豫词，建议减少口头语，表达更流畅自然，并用具体例子支持观点。

例: I think some people dislike making lists because they prefer flexibility. For example, they adapt quickly to changes and make decisions spontaneously rather than following a fixed plan.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，建议使用完整句子，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always carry it with me. It's more convenient than paper since I can easily check and update my list anytime.

× Yes, I always make a list on my phone when I'm going shopping because I am a person who likes to plan for everything so I think this way can make the thing I need to buy more clear and.

✓ Yes, I always make a list on my phone when I'm going shopping because I am a person who likes to plan for everything, so I think this way can make the things I need to buy clearer.

原句句子结构不完整，最后以“and”结尾，缺少后续内容。应将句子完整表达，且“the thing”应为复数形式“the things”，形容词“clear”应使用比较级“clearer”来表达更清楚的意思。

× Yes, I do make a list for the everyday work because that can help me clear what things I need to do everyday and help me avoid missing something that is necessary.

✓ Yes, I do make a list for everyday work because it can help me clarify what things I need to do every day and help me avoid missing something necessary.

“the everyday work”中“the”不合适，应去掉；“clear”用作动词时不准确，应使用“clarify”；“everyday”作为形容词，表示“日常的”，而“every day”表示“每天”，此处应使用“every day”。

× Also I can clear the time that I need to.

✓ Also, I can manage the time that I need to.

“clear the time”表达不准确，应该用“manage the time”或“organize the time”；句子缺少逗号，导致结构不清晰。

× They pre they prefer to umm, adapt to the changes and they can make better decisions when things change.

✓ They prefer to adapt to changes and can make better decisions when things change.

句子中有重复“pre they”，应删除多余部分；“the changes”改为“changes”更自然；去掉多余的“umm”，使句子更流畅。

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because I carry mobile everyday.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because I carry my mobile every day.

“carry mobile”缺少所有格，应为“carry my mobile”；“everyday”应分开写为“every day”，表示“每天”。

× But carrying a paper with me is not that convenient because I need to check my everyday and it's convenient to make it.

✓ But carrying a paper with me is not that convenient because I need to check it every day, and it's convenient to make it on my phone.

“check my everyday”表达不完整，应为“check it every day”；句子缺少明确指代，补充“on my phone”使意思完整。