List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Use clear linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'helped me', say 'it helps me to do everything efficiently'. Also, keep your answer within 4-5 sentences for better clarity.

例: Most of the time, I make a shopping list on my mobile because it is a convenient way to stay organised. It helps me shop efficiently since I can check off items and ensure I don't forget anything.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by structuring it better and correcting grammar. Start with a direct answer, then explain with linking words like 'because' or 'since'. Also, avoid repeating words like 'it's'.

例: Honestly, I don't make a list for my work because I do shift duties and the situation is unpredictable. Since I work with critically ill patients, it's difficult to plan tasks in advance.

提案: Try to use clearer vocabulary and avoid unclear phrases like 'fire as a BL bird'. Explain your ideas with simple and precise words. Also, use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: I think some people don't like making lists because they feel it restricts their freedom. They may feel bound by rules and prefer to be more spontaneous.

提案: Avoid repeating the same idea multiple times. Use linking words to combine sentences and complete your thoughts. Also, check grammar such as 'make list' should be 'make a list'.

例: I prefer to make a list on my mobile because it is very convenient and always with me. This makes it easy to access my list wherever I go.

× it's helped me to help me to do everything efficiently

✓ it helps me to do everything efficiently

The phrase 'it's helped' incorrectly uses the past participle form 'helped' with 'it is'. The correct form is the simple present 'it helps' to match the present tense context of the sentence.

× I would like to make a list on my mobile

✓ I would like to make a list on my mobile phone

The phrase 'on my mobile' is acceptable but 'mobile phone' is clearer and more standard. However, this is a minor style suggestion rather than a strict grammar error.

× because To Do List is more convenient way to me to stay organised

✓ because the To Do List is a more convenient way for me to stay organised

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'To Do List' and the preposition 'for' is needed before 'me'. Also, 'more convenient way' requires the article 'a'.

× because I have a thing to do shift duty

✓ because I have to do shift duty

The phrase 'I have a thing to do shift duty' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I have to do shift duty' to indicate obligation.

× I work with patients who I may be critically I'll

✓ I work with patients who may be critically ill

The pronoun 'I' is incorrectly used instead of 'may be'. Also, 'I'll' is a contraction for 'I will' and is incorrect here; the correct word is 'ill'.

× it'll be binding them to some category

✓ it will be binding them to some category

The contraction 'it'll' is acceptable but in formal speech 'it will' is clearer. This is a minor style issue.

× so they can't fire as a BL bird

✓ so they can't fly as a free bird

The phrase 'fire as a BL bird' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or typo. The correct phrase is 'fly as a free bird' meaning to be free and unrestricted.

× I prefer to make list on my mobile

✓ I prefer to make a list on my mobile

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'list'.

× its always in my hand

✓ it's always in my hand

The word 'its' is a possessive pronoun, but here the contraction 'it's' (it is) is needed.

× Its easy to go everywhere with it and it's in my hand always so it's very.

✓ It's easy to go everywhere with it and it's always in my hand, so it's very convenient.

The sentence is missing the contraction 'It's' at the start, the adverb 'always' is better placed before 'in my hand', and the sentence ends abruptly; adding 'convenient' completes the thought.