List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and reduce redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'and', use 'because' or 'so that'.

例: Yes, I always make a list before shopping because it helps me avoid confusion and saves time. For instance, I keep the list on my phone so I don't forget anything while standing in line.

提案: Be careful with pronouns and repetition; 'her' seems incorrect here. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and linking words to improve coherence. For example, use 'because' once and add 'which helps me stay on track'.

例: Yes, I always keep a To-Do List because I have deadlines for college assignments and bills, which helps me stay organized and on track.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid informal corrections like 'not organ'. Use linking words to connect your points logically and provide specific reasons or examples.

例: I think some people dislike making lists because they prefer a more spontaneous lifestyle. Additionally, some may find strict organization stressful, so it doesn't suit everyone.

提案: Avoid repetition like 'the phone is the the phone' and filler phrases such as 'oh'. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is always with me. For example, when I see something online, I quickly add it to my notes app or use voicemail to remind myself.

× Yes, I like keeping her To Do List always because because I always have to wait a deadline whether it's for my college or whether it's the deadline for paying a bill.

✓ Yes, I like keeping my To Do List always because I always have to meet a deadline whether it's for my college or for paying a bill.

The pronoun 'her' is incorrectly used to refer to the student's own list; it should be 'my' to indicate possession. Also, 'wait a deadline' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'meet a deadline' meaning to complete something by a certain time.

× Yes, I like keeping her To Do List always because because I always have to wait a deadline whether it's for my college or whether it's the deadline for paying a bill.

✓ Yes, I like keeping my To Do List always because I always have to meet a deadline whether it's for my college or for paying a bill.

The preposition 'for' is correctly used before 'my college' and 'paying a bill' to indicate the purpose or context of the deadline. The original sentence had 'whether it's for my college or whether it's the deadline for paying a bill' which is acceptable, but removing the repeated 'whether' and adjusting prepositions improves clarity.

× So keeping a list helps me feel more organised and in track.

✓ So keeping a list helps me feel more organised and on track.

The phrase 'in track' is incorrect; the correct idiomatic expression is 'on track' meaning to be progressing as planned.

× I think some people usually don't like living an organized life, not organ.

✓ I think some people usually don't like living an organized life, not everyone.

The word 'organ' is a fragment and does not fit the sentence. It seems the speaker intended to say 'not everyone' to clarify that being organized is not for all people.

× I usually like keeping the list on my phone because the phone is the the phone is the closest thing that I used and whenever I see something online and I quickly think about oh I have to purchase it so I quickly go to my the notes app and just add it.

✓ I usually like keeping the list on my phone because the phone is the closest thing that I use and whenever I see something online and quickly think, 'Oh, I have to purchase it,' I quickly go to my notes app and just add it.

The pronoun 'used' is incorrect; it should be 'use' to match the present tense context. Also, 'my the notes app' is redundant; it should be 'my notes app'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.