List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复和冗余，使回答更简洁流畅。

例: No, I usually don't make a list when I go shopping because I prefer to buy things spontaneously.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句型，明确说明是否制作清单及其效果。

例: I don't usually make a list for work, but I keep records of the products I sell to track my commissions.

提案: 回答不够具体且语法错误明显。建议给出更具体的原因，并用连词连接句子，使表达更连贯。

例: Some people don't like making lists because they prefer to rely on their memory, and they find lists restrictive.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议简化句子结构，明确表达偏好，并使用连词使句子更流畅。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's convenient, especially when I work part-time for different people.

× Actually I don't make list because I think I go to the shop, just walk in, never do the lease and go to buying something.

✓ Actually I don't make a list because I think when I go to the shop, I just walk in, never make the list and go to buy something.

这里的“list”是可数名词，前面需要加不定冠词“a”。另外，“go to buying”应改为“go to buy”，因为“go to”后面接动词原形表示目的。

× No, I'm not make a list, but I will recording some sales products.

✓ No, I don't make a list, but I will record some sales products.

“I'm not make”是错误的表达，正确的否定形式是“I don't make”。“will recording”中“will”后应接动词原形“record”，而不是动名词。

× No, I'm not make a list, but I will recording some sales products.

✓ No, I don't make a list, but I will record some sales products.

助动词“will”后面应接动词原形，不能接动名词形式。

× When I sell it, I will record because I can get some Commission on this sale product.

✓ When I sell it, I will record because I can get some commission on this sale product.

“Commission”不需要大写，且句子结构正确，无需动词-ing形式。

× That's why I recall.

✓ That's why I remember.

“Recall”通常用作正式或书面语，口语中更常用“remember”。此外，“recall”作为动词时不常单独使用，需搭配宾语。

× This one I don't know actually, because this is a personality dependence personnel.

✓ Actually, I don't know about this, because it depends on personality.

原句中“personality dependence personnel”表达不清，语法混乱，应改为“depends on personality”表示“取决于个性”。

× Yeah, actually I do some lease on my phone already because sometimes I do some like the part time job, I work for other person then I need make a list of I do which job then after this month end.

✓ Yeah, actually I already make some lists on my phone because sometimes I do part-time jobs, I work for other people, then I need to make a list of which jobs I do after the month ends.

“lease”应为“list”；“part time job”应为复数“part-time jobs”；“other person”应为复数“other people”；“need make”应为“need to make”；句子结构需调整以符合英语表达习惯。