List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了个人感受，但语法和表达不够准确，且内容稍显重复。建议简化句子结构，避免语法错误，并增加具体细节使回答更丰富。

例: I usually don't make a list when I shop because I enjoy exploring supermarkets and malls. This helps me relax and makes shopping feel like a hobby.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，并用连接词使内容连贯。

例: I don't usually make lists for work because my job doesn't require it. However, I find making lists very helpful for my university studies when I feel confused about what to do next.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，表达含糊且有语法错误。建议用更准确的词汇表达观点，并提供具体原因。

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to live spontaneously and enjoy unexpected experiences instead of planning everything.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always have it with me. Paper lists can be easily lost or thrown away by mistake.

× It's really helped me feel relaxed and comfortable and I think it's could be a hobby.

✓ It's really helped me feel relaxed and comfortable and I think it could be a hobby.

这里的“it's could”中“it's”是“it is”的缩写，后面不应该直接跟“could”，应去掉“is”，直接用“it could”。

× My job doesn't need me to make this, but I will say make a list is very good with my study because I'm still a student study with university and it is very helpful when I don't know what should I do in this moment and they always told me what should I do.

✓ My job doesn't require me to make one, but I will say making a list is very good for my study because I'm still a student studying at university and it is very helpful when I don't know what I should do at the moment and they always tell me what I should do.

句中“make this”不自然，改为“make one”更合适；“study with university”应为“studying at university”；“what should I do”语序错误，疑问句语序不应用于陈述句，应改为“what I should do”；“they always told”时态不对，应为现在时“tell”。

× Like they really want to have some experience that they didn't know and doesn't realize or just don't want to play anymore.

✓ Like they really want to have some experiences that they didn't know and don't realize or just don't want to play anymore.

“some experience”应为复数“some experiences”表示多种经历；“doesn't realize”主语是复数“they”，动词应为“don't realize”。

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because uh mobile mobile phone can take away and follow me everywhere.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because a mobile phone can be taken away and follow me everywhere.

“mobile mobile phone”重复，应改为“a mobile phone”；“can take away”表达不准确，应改为被动语态“can be taken away”表示“可以带走”；“follow me everywhere”保持不变。

× And if you make a list on your paper might be forget some way or just lose to garbage can.

✓ And if you make a list on paper, you might forget it or just lose it in the garbage can.

“on your paper”应为“on paper”；“might be forget some way”语法错误，应为“you might forget it”；“lose to garbage can”应为“lose it in the garbage can”。