List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and natural flow. Try to form a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping. Since I am a makeup artist and run my own salon, I list the products I need to restock to ensure I don't forget anything important.

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and check grammar. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain how making lists helps your work.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work regularly. For example, last week I checked my phone and noticed some products were running low, so I made a list to buy them, which really helped me stay organized.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and could be more natural. Use correct verb forms and provide clearer reasoning with linking words.

例: I believe some people dislike making lists because they have a sharp memory and prefer to remember things mentally instead of writing them down.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always have it with me, unlike paper. I use a note-taking app to write down my lists conveniently.

× I make a list when I go for shopping, like I am makeup artist and I open my salon and which product I don't have, so I make a list for shopping.

✓ I make a list when I go shopping, like I am a makeup artist and I open my salon and note which products I don't have, so I make a list for shopping.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go shopping' without 'for'. Also, 'makeup artist' needs an article 'a' before it. 'Which product I don't have' is unclear and should be rephrased to 'note which products I don't have' for clarity and correctness.

× I make a list when I go for shopping, like I am makeup artist and I open my salon and which product I don't have, so I make a list for shopping.

✓ I make a list when I go shopping, like I am a makeup artist and I open my salon and note which products I don't have, so I make a list for shopping.

The noun 'makeup artist' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it because it is singular and countable.

× I remember in the last week I run over my cell phone and I saw some products are less and I thought I buy new product and I make a list it is help me.

✓ I remember last week I looked over my cell phone and saw some products were running low, so I thought I should buy new products and made a list; it helped me.

The verb 'run' should be in past tense 'ran' or better replaced with 'looked over' for clarity. 'Saw some products are less' is incorrect; it should be 'saw some products were running low'. 'I thought I buy' should be 'I thought I should buy'. 'I make a list it is help me' should be 'I made a list; it helped me' to maintain past tense consistency.

× some people does not like making lists because they have a more memorable mind and sharp mind, so they don't like making lists.

✓ some people do not like making lists because they have a more memorable and sharp mind, so they don't like making lists.

The subject 'some people' is plural, so the verb should be 'do not' instead of 'does not'.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because I don't have paper in anywhere, but I have my phone and on my mobile I have a notebook.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because I don't have paper anywhere, but I have my phone and on my mobile I have a notebook.

The phrase 'in anywhere' is incorrect; the correct phrase is simply 'anywhere' without a preposition.

× And I write the my list.

✓ And I write my list.

The phrase 'the my list' is incorrect because 'my' already specifies the noun; 'the' should be removed.