List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ như 'go shop shopping'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

例: No, I usually don't make a list when I shop because I only buy things I need at the moment. I find it easier to remember what I want without writing it down.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời khá đầy đủ nhưng câu trả lời có phần lặp lại và không mạch lạc, ví dụ như câu 'How? However'. Bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối hợp lý và tránh lặp từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: Yes, I usually make a list to stay organized at work. However, sometimes I struggle to follow it strictly because of lack of discipline. To improve, I plan to prioritize tasks better and stick to my list more carefully.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể sử dụng thêm từ nối để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng từ vựng đa dạng hơn và tránh lặp từ như 'find'.

例: I think some people dislike making lists because they find it difficult to follow them strictly. Also, it can be time-consuming, so they prefer to act spontaneously instead.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'uh' và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's convenient and I always have my phone with me. Unlike paper lists, I won't lose them and can check my list anytime.

× To be honest, making a list when shopping is not my hobby.

✓ To be honest, making a list when shopping is not my habit.

The word 'hobby' refers to an activity done regularly for pleasure, while 'habit' refers to a regular practice or routine. Since the sentence talks about a regular practice rather than a leisure activity, 'habit' is more appropriate.

× Actually, I go shop shopping whenever I need a specific thing and I don't have to make a list to remember things.

✓ Actually, I go shopping whenever I need a specific thing and I don't have to make a list to remember things.

The phrase 'go shop shopping' is incorrect because 'shop' and 'shopping' are redundant here. The correct form is 'go shopping' to indicate the activity of shopping.

× Yes, I usually make a list from my work to stay organised.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list for my work to stay organised.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect in this context. 'Make a list for my work' correctly indicates the purpose of the list.

× However, sometimes it doesn't work well because I'm not disciplined enough to follow it strictly. How? However, I will plan to prioritize my tax better and stick to the list more carefully.

✓ However, sometimes it doesn't work well because I'm not disciplined enough to follow it strictly. Therefore, I plan to prioritize my tasks better and stick to the list more carefully.

The word 'How?' is out of place and confusing. Also, 'However' is repeated unnecessarily. 'Therefore' is a better conjunction to show consequence. Additionally, 'tax' should be 'tasks' to make sense in context.

× From my perspective, I think it is because people find it hard to follow the list strictly and they can find it sometimes time consuming, so they will find it better to do things spontaneously instead of making a list.

✓ From my perspective, I think it is because people find it hard to follow the list strictly and sometimes find it time-consuming, so they prefer to do things spontaneously instead of making a list.

The phrase 'they can find it sometimes time consuming' is awkward and redundant. 'Sometimes find it time-consuming' is clearer. Also, 'they will find it better' is better expressed as 'they prefer' for naturalness.

× Uh, in my opinion, making a list on my phone is probably better as you can have your paper lost while uh, you can bring your phone along with you anytime, anywhere, which is really convenient and you can see your list anytime you want to.

✓ Uh, in my opinion, making a list on my phone is probably better because you can lose your paper, but you can bring your phone along with you anytime, anywhere, which is really convenient and you can see your list anytime you want.

The phrase 'you can have your paper lost' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'you can lose your paper'. Also, 'while' is not appropriate here; 'but' is better to contrast the ideas.