List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“I'm not real fan”应为“I'm not a real fan”，且句子结构不够连贯。建议注意冠词的使用，避免句子断裂，表达更自然流畅。

例: Actually, I'm not a big fan of shopping. I prefer to buy only the things I really need, so instead of making a list on paper, I usually make a list in my mind.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“However, I 'cause”不完整且难以理解。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达原因，并避免语法错误。

例: I used to make lists to help me stay organized and focused on my tasks. However, because I often failed to complete tasks according to the list, I now rely more on my memory and experience to manage my work.

提案: 回答中有重复和不连贯的表达，如“may and may influence”。建议避免口头语“uh”，并使用连贯的句子表达观点。

例: Many people prefer to be spontaneous and flexible. They might think that making lists is very restrictive and could negatively affect their mood if they fail to complete the tasks on the list.

提案: 回答中存在词汇使用错误和表达不自然的问题，如“relaxed happily on the phone”和“diffusion of the techno knowledge”。建议使用正确词汇，表达清晰自然。

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone to help me organize my tasks. With the development of technology, there are many apps that can help you manage your tasks effectively and efficiently.

× Actually, I'm not real fan of shopping.

✓ Actually, I'm not a real fan of shopping.

这里缺少冠词“a”，因为“fan”是可数名词，单数形式前需要加冠词。

× I would like to buy some things that I really need so.

✓ I would like to buy some things that I really need.

句尾的“so”用法不当，导致句子不完整，应去掉。

× So compared to making lists on the paper, I prefer to make a list on my mind.

✓ So compared to making lists on paper, I prefer to make a list in my mind.

“on the paper”中“the”不必要，且习惯用法是“on paper”；“on my mind”应改为“in my mind”，表示在脑海中。

× I used to make a list to help me stay organized and focused on tasks.

✓ I used to make lists to help me stay organized and focused on tasks.

“make a list”应改为复数“make lists”，因为习惯上表示经常做多次列表。

× However, I 'cause I often failed to complete my task according to the list.

✓ However, I often failed to complete my tasks according to the list.

句中“'cause”用法错误且多余，应删除；“task”应为复数“tasks”，与上下文一致。

× So now I rely on my memory and experience to come to manage my work.

✓ So now I rely on my memory and experience to manage my work.

“come to manage”结构不正确，应直接用“to manage”。

× They might think that making this is very restrictive and may and may influence their mood if they fail to complete the tasks according to the list.

✓ They might think that making lists is very restrictive and may influence their mood if they fail to complete the tasks according to the list.

“making this”指代不明，应改为“making lists”；“may and may”重复，应删去一个“may”。

× I relaxed happily on the phone to help me organize my tasks.

✓ I rely happily on the phone to help me organize my tasks.

“relaxed”用法错误，表达依赖手机应使用“rely on”；“relaxed”是形容词或过去式，不符合语境。

× You know, with the diffusion of the techno knowledge, there are a lot of apps can help you organize your tasks, so I think it's very effective and efficient.

✓ You know, with the diffusion of technology, there are a lot of apps that can help you organize your tasks, so I think it's very effective and efficient.

“techno knowledge”用词错误，应为“technology”；“apps can help”缺少关系代词“that”；“diffusion of the techno knowledge”中“the”不必要。