List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "I guess" at the end, and correct grammar errors like "it's has influence" to "it affects". Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting detail using linking words.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because I have a poor memory, especially since working night shifts affects it.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and directly answer the question. Use linking words to explain why you don't need a list for work.

例: I don't make a list for my work because I do the same tasks every day, so I don't need to remind myself.

提案: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Avoid repeating words like "it's" and improve sentence structure. Provide a clear reason with linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Some people dislike making lists because seeing all their tasks can stress them out.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating "my phone" multiple times.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's always with me, so I can easily check my list whenever I need to.

× As you know I work night shifts so it's has influence on my memory and I guess.

✓ As you know I work night shifts so it has an influence on my memory, I guess.

The phrase 'it's has' is incorrect because 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' or 'it has', and here 'has' is used redundantly. The correct form is 'it has'. Also, the article 'an' is needed before 'influence' because 'influence' is a singular countable noun in this context.

× For my work I don't need list because I have.

✓ For my work, I don't need a list because I have one.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. 'I have' needs an object to complete the meaning. Adding 'a list' and 'one' clarifies the sentence. Also, the article 'a' is necessary before 'list' as it is a singular countable noun.

× I need I'm doing every day the same job, so there is nothing different to make a list.

✓ I don't need one because I do the same job every day, so there is nothing different to make a list for.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'I need I'm doing' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't need one'. The verb tense is corrected to present simple 'do' to match habitual action. The phrase 'nothing different to make a list' is clarified to 'nothing different to make a list for' to complete the meaning.

× Maybe because it's it's stress them when they see list of their. Works that they need to do, it's maybe stress them.

✓ Maybe because it stresses them when they see a list of their work that they need to do; it maybe stresses them.

The phrase 'it's it's stress them' is incorrect; 'it stresses them' is correct for third person singular present tense. 'List of their. Works' should be 'a list of their work' (work is uncountable here). Also, 'stress' should be 'stresses' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.