List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'um'. Also, use clearer sentence structures and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of saying 'sometimes I used to forget about the things what I want to buy', say 'sometimes I forget what I want to buy'.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because I often forget the items I need. Writing down groceries helps me shop efficiently and saves time.

提案: Focus on clearer sentence construction and avoid awkward phrases like 'sticking out every'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to be more specific about how the list helps you.

例: Yes, I sometimes make a to-do list on my phone to organise my tasks. This helps me remember what I need to complete and manage my time better.

提案: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to give a direct opinion and support it with reasons. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid grammatical errors.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to rely on their memory. Additionally, they might find lists time-consuming or unnecessary.

提案: Try to use past and present tenses correctly and avoid abrupt sentence endings. Also, use linking words to compare your preferences clearly.

例: When I was a child, I preferred making lists on paper. However, now I find using my phone more convenient because it reduces the risk of losing my notes.

× sometimes I used to forget about the things what I want to buy

✓ sometimes I used to forget about the things that I wanted to buy

The sentence mixes past tense 'used to forget' with present tense 'want'. To maintain tense consistency, 'want' should be changed to past tense 'wanted' because the action refers to past habitual forgetting.

× the things what I want to buy

✓ the things that I want to buy

In English, 'that' is the correct relative pronoun to refer to things, not 'what'. Using 'what' here is incorrect; it should be replaced with 'that'.

× by writing a list of uh, uh, grocery things or something I want to purchase

✓ by writing a list of grocery items or something I want to purchase

The phrase 'grocery things' is awkward; 'grocery items' is the correct collocation. Also, 'by writing a list of grocery items' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× I really uh, it's the most efficient and time saving

✓ I really think it's the most efficient and time-saving

The sentence lacks a verb after 'I really'. Adding 'think' completes the sentence. Also, 'time saving' should be hyphenated as 'time-saving' when used as an adjective.

× sometimes I used to make a list for my work to just schedule what are the things I have to do and complete

✓ sometimes I used to make a list for my work to just schedule the things I had to do and complete

The phrase 'what are the things I have to do' is incorrect in this context. It should be 'the things I had to do' to maintain past tense consistency with 'used to'.

× It just helps me really great by just sticking out every

✓ It just helps me really well by just sticking to it every time

The phrase 'helps me really great' is incorrect; 'helps me really well' is correct. Also, 'sticking out every' is unclear; likely intended 'sticking to it every time'.

× if a person don't want to forget about their important task

✓ if a person doesn't want to forget about their important tasks

The subject 'a person' is singular, so the verb should be 'doesn't' not 'don't'. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to agree with 'their'.

× people would not like to make a list

✓ people do not like to make a list

'Would not like' suggests conditional mood, but the context is general. Using 'do not like' is more appropriate for general statements.

× they can really just take they take a list

✓ they can really just take a list

The phrase 'they take a list' is redundant and incorrect here. Removing the repeated 'they take' corrects the sentence.

× When I was a child I used to prefer to make a list on my paper

✓ When I was a child I used to prefer making a list on paper

The verb 'prefer' is usually followed by gerund form 'making' rather than 'to make'. Also, 'on my paper' is better as 'on paper'.

× It just more helpful for me

✓ It is just more helpful for me

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct.

× I don't have the risk of losing it

✓ I don't have the risk of losing it

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.