List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点并给出了例子，但句子结构较为简单，且部分表达不够地道。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复，如将“making a list is the best way for me that can remind me”改为“making a list helps me remember important items”。

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me remember all the important items I need. For instance, if I plan to cook a new dish, I write down all the ingredients before heading to the store.

提案: 回答内容清晰，但语言表达稍显重复和简单。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并丰富词汇，如用“overwhelmed”替代“very confused”。

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it is very useful. Sometimes, when many tasks occur simultaneously, I feel overwhelmed. Therefore, I prepare a list in advance covering all the jobs to ensure nothing is missed.

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，且句子结构较为简单。建议避免“this kind of people”这种表达，改为“some people”。同时，使用更自然的连接词和表达方式。

例: Some people dislike making lists for a few reasons. Firstly, they feel it wastes time and prefer to start tasks immediately. Secondly, unexpected tasks often arise, so they believe lists can't solve every problem.

提案: 回答内容完整，但表达略显重复和不够流畅。建议使用更自然的连接词如“because”替代“firstly”并简化句子结构。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always carry it with me, unlike a notebook. Also, it's easier to add or remove items on a phone list whenever I need to.

× I always make a list when I go shopping because making a list is the best way for me that can remind me of some important things.

✓ I always make a list when I go shopping because making a list is the best way for me to remind me of some important things.

这里的错误是介词使用不当，'way for me that can remind me'结构不正确，应该用不定式'to remind'来表达目的，即“提醒我”。

× I will make a list of all necessary materials before I go to the shops.

✓ I will make a list of all necessary materials before I go shopping.

这里的'go to the shops'虽然语法正确，但在购物语境中更常用表达是'go shopping'，更自然简洁。

× Yes, I always make a list for my work and its very useful.

✓ Yes, I always make a list for my work and it's very useful.

这里的'its'缺少撇号，应为'it's'，表示'it is'，这是代词和动词的缩写形式。

× Sometimes all things occur simultaneously which makes me very confused.

✓ Sometimes all things occur simultaneously, which makes me very confused.

这里缺少逗号，关系代词引导的非限制性定语从句前应加逗号，表示附加说明。

× So I will make a list in advance which covers all the jobs I need to do to ensure nothing will be missed.

✓ So I will make a list in advance that covers all the jobs I need to do to ensure nothing will be missed.

关系代词'which'用于非限制性定语从句，限定性定语从句应使用'that'，这里是限定性定语从句，应改为'that'。

× There are some reasons for this kind of people.

✓ There are some reasons for this kind of person.

'this kind of'后面应接单数名词，表示“一类人”，而不是复数'people'。

× some people don't want to waste their time on making a list, they just want to do the job immediately.

✓ some people don't want to waste their time making a list, they just want to do the job immediately.

'waste time'后面直接接动名词，不需要介词'on'。

× some unexpected tasks just come up suddenly, so list cannot solve everything.

✓ some unexpected tasks just come up suddenly, so a list cannot solve everything.

这里缺少冠词'a'，'list'作为可数名词，单数形式前应加冠词。

× I prefer to make a list on my phone, firstly because I may not take my notebook to everywhere, but I will take my phone to everywhere and secondly, if I want to change the list, it's easier to erase or add some items on the phone.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone, firstly because I may not take my notebook everywhere, but I will take my phone everywhere, and secondly, if I want to change the list, it's easier to erase or add some items on the phone.

'take ... to everywhere'是不正确的表达，'everywhere'前不加介词'to'，直接用动词加副词即可。