List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 'load down' 대신 'write down'을 사용하고, 'the what I have to buy it' 부분은 'what I need to buy'로 수정하세요. 또한, 문장을 간결하게 하여 중복을 피하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I always write down a shopping list because I have a bad memory. It helps me remember what I need to buy.

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 'the for prevent of it'는 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 대신 'to prevent this'를 사용하고, 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 만드세요.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because when I practice dance, especially improvisation, I sometimes forget what to do. To prevent this, I write a list.

提案: 답변이 중복되고 어색한 표현이 많습니다. 'bothering' 대신 'bothersome'이나 'annoying'을 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 하여 명확한 이유를 제시하세요.

例: Some people don't like making lists because it feels bothersome and they prefer to be spontaneous rather than always planning.

提案: 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'prefer make' 대신 'prefer to make'를 사용하고, 'fills me a very cozy'는 부자연스러운 표현입니다. 대신 'makes me feel comfortable'로 수정하세요.

例: I prefer to make lists on paper because I'm used to writing by hand. It makes me feel comfortable, especially when I lie down.

× Whenever I go to shop I load down my shopping list 'cause I have a bad memory.

✓ Whenever I go shopping I write down my shopping list because I have a bad memory.

The phrase 'go to shop' is incorrect; the verb 'go' should be followed by the gerund form 'shopping' to indicate the activity. Also, 'load down' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'write down' when referring to making a list.

× So it helps me to remember the what I have to buy it in the shop.

✓ So it helps me to remember what I have to buy in the shop.

The phrase 'the what' is incorrect; 'what' alone is sufficient. Also, the pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here because 'what I have to buy' already functions as the object.

× So the for prevent of it I make a list for.

✓ So to prevent that, I make a list.

The phrase 'the for prevent of it' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'to prevent that'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and awkward; simplifying it improves clarity.

× Yeah, absolutely it works 'cause I usually practice dance and sometimes I focus on improvisation and then I forget what I have to do.

✓ Yeah, absolutely it works because I usually practice dancing and sometimes I focus on improvisation, and then I forget what I have to do.

The verb 'practice' should be followed by the gerund form 'dancing' to indicate the activity. Also, 'cause' should be expanded to 'because' for formal correctness.

× I think it's very bothering sometimes, you know, it had it means we need to have a plan and it's sometimes very bothering and I wanna feel lazy sometimes.

✓ I think it's very bothersome sometimes, you know, it means we need to have a plan, and sometimes it's very bothersome, and I want to feel lazy sometimes.

The adjective 'bothering' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'bothersome'. Also, 'had it means' is incorrect and should be 'it means'. 'Wanna' is informal and should be 'want to'.

× I prefer make a list on a paper 'cause I'm used to on write down on paper so it fills me a very cozy and feels nice when I lie down.

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper because I'm used to writing things down on paper, so it makes me feel very cozy and feels nice when I lie down.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by 'to' plus the base verb: 'prefer to make'. The phrase 'on a paper' is incorrect; it should be 'on paper'. 'Used to on write down' is incorrect; it should be 'used to writing things down'. 'Fills me a very cozy' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'makes me feel very cozy'.