List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, then explain your method and its drawback. Avoid repetition and improve fluency by reducing hesitations and filler words.

例: I usually make a mental list before going shopping, but I don't write it down. Because of this, I sometimes forget to buy certain items.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Avoid repetition and improve grammar, for example, use 'have to do' instead of 'to done'.

例: Yes, I do make lists for my work because as a PhD student, I have many tasks to manage. Therefore, I prioritise my work by listing which tasks should be done first.

提案: Clarify your ideas and avoid unclear phrases like 'some caramel'. Use correct grammar and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they are not used to organising their tasks that way. It's normal since not everyone prefers to plan everything in advance.

提案: Start with a clear preference statement, then explain your reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because writing by hand helps me remember better. In contrast, I sometimes forget my lists when I use my phone.

× So I didn't have a written list for what kind of what kind of goods I want to buy, so sometimes I just forgot to buy the things in my list.

✓ So I didn't have a written list for what kind of goods I wanted to buy, so sometimes I just forgot to buy the things in my list.

The sentence mixes past tense ('didn't have') with present tense ('want'). To maintain consistency, 'want' should be changed to 'wanted' to match the past tense context.

× so sometimes I just forgot to buy the things in my list.

✓ so sometimes I just forgot to buy the things on my list.

The phrase 'in my list' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to items listed. Also, 'forgot' is correctly in past tense here.

× Actually the the answer is yes, because I'm doing a PhD now and I have a lot of work to done simultaneously.

✓ Actually the answer is yes, because I'm doing a PhD now and I have a lot of work to do simultaneously.

The phrase 'to done' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to do' after 'have a lot of work'. 'Done' is past participle and does not fit here.

× So sometimes I have to make a list to prioritize which which work should be done first.

✓ So sometimes I have to make a list to prioritize which work should be done first.

The repetition of 'which' is an error and should be removed for clarity.

× I think it's sometimes some people just some caramel.

✓ I think sometimes some people are just stubborn.

The phrase 'some caramel' is nonsensical here; likely a mispronunciation or error. It should be replaced with a meaningful adjective like 'stubborn' to convey the intended meaning.

× So they didn't they they are not used to having a list for everything.

✓ So they are not used to having a list for everything.

The phrase 'they didn't they they' is redundant and incorrect. It should be simplified to 'they are not used to' for grammatical correctness.

× So I think it's quite normal. You cannot ask everyone has the list before they doing things.

✓ So I think it's quite normal. You cannot expect everyone to have a list before they do things.

The phrase 'ask everyone has' is incorrect; 'expect everyone to have' is correct. Also, 'they doing' should be 'they do' to maintain correct verb form.

× Yes, I prefer to make this in a paper because I like write things down, use my hand and that can help me remember things more more clear.

✓ Yes, I prefer to make this on paper because I like to write things down using my hand and that can help me remember things more clearly.

The phrase 'make this in a paper' is incorrect; 'on paper' is the correct expression. Also, 'like write' should be 'like to write'. 'Use my hand' should be 'using my hand'. 'More more clear' should be 'more clearly' as an adverb.

× I think Instead when I use my phone I sometimes forgot the list.

✓ I think instead when I use my phone I sometimes forget the list.

The verb 'forgot' is past tense but the sentence context is present tense ('when I use my phone'), so it should be 'forget'.