List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more concise. Avoid repetition and filler words like 'uh' and 'I, I'. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence. For example, you could say: "Sometimes I make a shopping list, but other times I don't because I remember what I need. However, my family usually makes a list to ensure they don't forget anything."

例: Sometimes I make a shopping list, but other times I don't because I remember what I need. However, my family usually makes a list to ensure they don't forget anything.

提案: Focus on answering the question directly and clearly. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, you could say: "I am currently a student, so I don't have a job that requires a list. However, I often make lists for my assignments to stay organised."

例: I am currently a student, so I don't have a job that requires a list. However, I often make lists for my assignments to stay organised.

提案: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to structure your response. For example, you could say: "Some people don't like making lists because they prefer to do things spontaneously. However, making a list helps with planning and completing tasks efficiently."

例: Some people don't like making lists because they prefer to do things spontaneously. However, making a list helps with planning and completing tasks efficiently.

提案: Try to avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Give a clear preference and support it with specific reasons using linking words. For example, you could say: "I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's more convenient. I don't have to look for pen and paper, and I can easily edit the list whenever I want."

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's more convenient. I don't have to look for pen and paper, and I can easily edit the list whenever I want.

× Sometimes I make a list and unfortunately sometimes I didn't make the list because, uh, I, I have made the clear in my mind that I'll only go to the list of when I whenever I need.

✓ Sometimes I make a list and unfortunately sometimes I don't make the list because, uh, I have made it clear in my mind that I'll only go to the list when I need to.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'didn't make' which is past tense, but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'don't make' is appropriate. Also, 'have made the clear' is incorrect; it should be 'have made it clear' to correctly use the past participle with the object 'it'. The phrase 'of when I whenever I need' is redundant and awkward; it is corrected to 'when I need to' for clarity and correctness.

× So I don't need to make a list. But in my family, they used to make a list. They want to try to get every.

✓ So I don't need to make a list. But in my family, they used to make lists. They want to try to get everything.

The word 'list' should be plural 'lists' because it refers to multiple instances of making lists. Also, 'every' is incomplete and should be 'everything' to correctly express the intended meaning.

× I am currently a student so I didn't have any kind of work right now, so I don't make any kind of list in my UH.

✓ I am currently a student so I don't have any kind of work right now, so I don't make any kind of list in my UH.

The phrase 'didn't have' is past tense, but the context 'right now' requires present tense 'don't have' to correctly indicate the current situation.

× What I see people often make a list for uh every work.

✓ What I see is people often make a list for every work.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' to connect the subject and complement, which is a sentence structure error. Also, 'a list' is correct here as it refers to a single list per work, so no plural correction needed.

× Because they can practice whatever they can do, so they can can make a list.

✓ Because they can practice whatever they can do, so they can make a list.

The phrase 'can can' is a repetition error; only one 'can' is needed to express ability.

× Once they made a list, they can execute in this list very well.

✓ Once they make a list, they can execute the tasks in this list very well.

'Once they made a list' uses past tense 'made' but the following verb 'can execute' is present tense modal, so the first verb should be present tense 'make' to maintain tense consistency. Also, 'execute in this list' is awkward; 'execute the tasks in this list' is clearer.

× So I think it's the good for the people who can make the list because they they may.

✓ So I think it's good for the people who can make the list because they may benefit from it.

The phrase 'it's the good' is incorrect; 'it's good' is correct. The sentence ends abruptly with 'they they may' which is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to a complete thought for clarity.

× Nowadays everyone has their own phones, so they I try.

✓ Nowadays everyone has their own phones, so I try.

The phrase 'they I try' is incorrect and confusing; it should be 'I try' to correctly reflect the speaker's action.

× I prefer to make a list on the phone instead of paper because I need to search for the pen and paper, so it's easy to make the list on the phone.

✓ I prefer to make a list on the phone instead of on paper because I need to search for the pen and paper, so it's easy to make the list on the phone.

The phrase 'instead of paper' is missing the preposition 'on' before 'paper' to correctly parallel 'on the phone' and maintain grammatical consistency.