List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse manque de clarté et de structure. Essayez de répondre directement à la question avec une phrase claire, puis ajoutez des détails spécifiques en utilisant des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus cohérente.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping. For example, I list items I need for myself and my family, which helps me stay organized and avoid forgetting anything.

提案: Votre réponse est difficile à comprendre et manque de détails spécifiques. Répondez directement à la question, expliquez comment vous utilisez la liste pour votre travail ou étude, et utilisez des mots de liaison pour clarifier votre propos.

例: Yes, I make lists for my studies. For instance, I list the topics I need to review, which helps me manage my time effectively and improve my learning.

提案: Votre réponse est confuse et contient des erreurs. Essayez d'expliquer clairement pourquoi certaines personnes n'aiment pas faire des listes, en donnant des raisons précises et en utilisant une structure correcte.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find it boring or feel it takes too much time. Additionally, they might prefer to remember things mentally rather than writing them down.

提案: Votre réponse est un peu désorganisée et contient des erreurs. Répondez clairement en exprimant votre préférence, puis expliquez pourquoi, en utilisant des phrases simples et des mots de liaison.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is convenient and fun to use. Writing on paper feels boring to me, so I usually use my mobile to keep track of my tasks.

× I in my perspective, when I go shop, I first of all I list my mobile, all categories, my mother's talk, I list my own mobile and then I go market.

✓ In my perspective, when I go shopping, first of all, I list all categories on my mobile, including my mother's talk, then I go to the market.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions, causing confusion. 'I in my perspective' should be 'In my perspective' to start the sentence properly. 'go shop' should be 'go shopping' to use the correct verb form. 'I first of all I list' is redundant; 'first of all, I list' is correct. 'my mobile, all categories, my mother's talk' is unclear; rephrased to 'all categories on my mobile, including my mother's talk' for clarity. 'go market' needs the preposition 'to' as 'go to the market'. These corrections improve sentence structure and clarity.

× Yes, I make a list for my study purpose when I first of all I list my all categories my how I improve my study purpose.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my study purposes. First of all, I list all categories on how I can improve my study.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. 'my study purpose' should be pluralized to 'study purposes' for natural expression. 'when I first of all I list my all categories my how I improve my study purpose' is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrased to 'First of all, I list all categories on how I can improve my study' to convey the intended meaning clearly and correctly.

× Some people don't like making leaks because they are cannot. List forget, but unfortunately most of people list. They are.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because they cannot remember them. Unfortunately, most people do make lists.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and contains unclear phrases. 'making leaks' should be 'making lists'. 'they are cannot' is incorrect; it should be 'they cannot'. 'List forget' is unclear; corrected to 'remember them' to express forgetting lists. 'most of people list. They are.' is incomplete and unclear; corrected to 'most people do make lists' for clarity and correctness.

× I definitely prefer my phone because it's not boring but when I write to list in paper I it's I boarding this moment I most of usually I list on my mobile. I enjoy it.

✓ I definitely prefer my phone because it's not boring. When I write a list on paper, it is boring. Most of the time, I usually list on my mobile. I enjoy it.

The original sentence has multiple structural issues and unclear phrases. 'write to list in paper' should be 'write a list on paper'. 'I it's I boarding this moment' is unclear and likely meant to be 'it is boring'. 'I most of usually I list on my mobile' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'Most of the time, I usually list on my mobile'. Breaking into shorter sentences improves clarity and readability.