List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas. For example, instead of saying 'I have a short memory and I easily forget the things,' you could say 'I tend to forget items easily.'

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I shop because I tend to forget items easily. Sometimes I write the list on my phone, and other times I jot it down on paper, depending on what's convenient.

提案: Focus on structuring your answer clearly with fewer hesitations and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say 'I don't usually make a list for work; instead, I plan my tasks mentally in the morning.'

例: I don't usually make a list for work. Instead, I plan my tasks mentally in the morning, which helps me stay organized throughout the day.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid filler words. Also, provide more specific reasons and use linking words to connect your points. For example, 'Some people avoid making lists because they believe they have a good memory and prefer not to spend time writing things down.'

例: Some people avoid making lists because they believe they have a good memory and prefer not to spend time writing things down. Additionally, they might find list-making unnecessary or inconvenient.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by reducing filler words and making the sentences more concise. Also, use linking words to show contrast. For example, 'I prefer paper lists when I have time and materials; otherwise, I use my phone.'

例: I prefer making lists on paper when I have enough time and a pen handy. However, if I'm in a hurry, I usually use my phone to make a list because it's more convenient.

× That's why sometime I make notes in my mobile phone or sometime I just write the things on a paper.

✓ That's why sometimes I make notes in my mobile phone or sometimes I just write the things on paper.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency (plural). Also, 'a paper' is incorrect here; 'paper' is uncountable in this context and does not need an article.

× I don't make list for doing any job or like particular work.

✓ I don't make a list for doing any job or particular work.

The noun 'list' is countable and requires an article 'a' when singular. Also, 'like particular work' is awkward; removing 'like' improves clarity.

× But yes, I think about the work or the things that I want to do in the morning and therefore I don't make any list in.

✓ But yes, I think about the work or the things that I want to do in the morning and therefore I don't make any list. I just make it in my mind.

The phrase 'make any list in' is incomplete and incorrect. The sentence is better split into two for clarity, and 'in' is unnecessary.

× As far as I think few people don't like making lists because umm, they have short memory, they think that they can umm, they don't forget the things and by necessary items whenever they go for shopping.

✓ As far as I think, few people don't like making lists because, umm, they have short memories, they think that they won't forget the things and necessary items whenever they go shopping.

'Memory' should be plural 'memories' to agree with 'few people'. Also, 'by necessary items' is incorrect; 'necessary items' alone suffices. 'Go for shopping' is better as 'go shopping'.

× Otherwise, uh, I always prefer to make lists on in my mobile phone.

✓ Otherwise, uh, I always prefer to make lists on my mobile phone.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary and incorrect when used with 'on' here. The correct phrase is 'make lists on my mobile phone.'