List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并避免重复。可以用更准确的词汇表达观点。

例: I usually don't make a shopping list because I prefer to buy things spontaneously. However, sometimes my mother makes the list for us.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用正确的句子结构，并具体说明做清单的好处。

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me organize tasks and improve efficiency every day.

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达重复且含糊。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并具体说明原因。

例: I think it depends on people's lifestyles. Some believe making lists takes extra time, while others feel they can't follow them.

提案: 回答较好，但有些语法错误和表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I use both paper and my phone for lists. For homework, I prefer paper, but for shopping, I use my phone because it's convenient.

× I like to buy some things just just like this music, if you want or you need, then you buy.

✓ I like to buy some things just like this music; if you want or need it, then you buy it.

这里'some things'是复数，后面指代的'music'是不可数名词，需用单数形式的代词'it'。另外，'just just'重复，应去掉一个。

× So I think we don't need a list and many times my mother will do it, not me.

✓ So I think we don't need a list, and many times my mother will do it, not I.

在正式语境中，'not me'应改为'not I'，因为这里是主格代词。

× If I work I think I will because the work is very important in my daily life.

✓ If I work, I think I will, because work is very important in my daily life.

'the work'在此处泛指工作，应去掉定冠词'the'，使用不可数名词'work'。

× So I think we need to make our work regularly and and improve his efficient.

✓ So I think we need to do our work regularly and improve its efficiency.

'make our work'表达不当，应改为'do our work'；'his efficient'错误，'efficient'是形容词，应使用名词'efficiency'，且指代工作用'its'。

× So I will make this to every day.

✓ So I will do this every day.

'make this to every day'表达错误，应改为'do this every day'，符合习惯用法。

× Some people maybe think doing lists will take more extra time and other people will think they can't they can't do things.

✓ Some people may think making lists will take extra time, and other people will think they can't do things.

'more extra time'重复，'extra'已表示额外，不需加'more'；'maybe'应为'may'；'doing lists'改为'making lists'更自然。

× Yeah, I will just both.

✓ Yeah, I will do both.

'I will just both'语法错误，应改为'I will do both'，表示两者都做。

× If I just make my homework, I will make a list on paper, but if I will go shopping in the afternoon, I will make it on my phone because it's very convenient.

✓ If I just do my homework, I will make a list on paper, but if I go shopping in the afternoon, I will make it on my phone because it's very convenient.

'make my homework'错误，应为'do my homework'；'if I will go'中不应使用将来时，改为'if I go'。