List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid redundancy and filler words like "uh" and "but" when they are unnecessary. Also, aim to complete your sentences fully and clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me remember everything I need. For example, when I go grocery shopping, I list all the items we need at home. This way, I can follow the list easily and avoid forgetting anything.

提案: Focus on clarity and avoid repeating words or phrases unnecessarily. Use linking words such as "so" or "therefore" to connect your ideas logically. Also, try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work and daily tasks. Every morning, I write down what I need to accomplish so I can stay organized. This helps me follow my schedule and complete all important tasks efficiently.

提案: Avoid making negative or judgmental statements about others. Instead, provide balanced reasons why some people might not like making lists. Use linking words to organize your ideas and be specific in your explanation.

例: Some people might not like making lists because they find it time-consuming or prefer to rely on their memory. Additionally, they may feel that lists limit their flexibility during the day.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use clear linking words like "however" to contrast past and present preferences. Also, complete your thoughts fully to make your answer more coherent.

例: Currently, I prefer making lists on my phone because it is convenient and always with me. However, I used to write lists on paper since I like the traditional method. Using my phone helps me keep track of everything easily.

× Although I have a very good and sharp memory, but I prefer to make a list of things I want to buy.

✓ Although I have a very good and sharp memory, I prefer to make a list of things I want to buy.

Using both 'although' and 'but' together is redundant because they serve the same purpose of introducing a contrast. You should use either 'although' or 'but', not both in the same sentence.

× And I am planning to buy, uh, for example, if I am going to a grocery shopping, then I, uh, I am making a list of all the groceries which we need at home.

✓ And I plan to buy, for example, if I am going grocery shopping, then I make a list of all the groceries we need at home.

The use of 'am planning' and 'am making' is awkward here; simple present tense 'plan' and 'make' better express habitual actions. Also, 'going a grocery shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'going grocery shopping' without 'a'.

× if I am going to a grocery shopping

✓ if I am going grocery shopping

The phrase 'going a grocery shopping' is incorrect because 'shopping' here is an uncountable activity noun and does not require the article 'a'. The correct form is 'going grocery shopping'.

× So it will be easier for me to follow the list and it can be a.

✓ So it will be easier for me to follow the list.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and it can be a' which is incomplete and unclear. Removing the incomplete part makes the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× I like to make a list for my everyday To Do List like a thing.

✓ I like to make a list for my everyday To Do List.

The phrase 'like a thing' is unnecessary and unclear in this context. Removing it improves clarity and correctness.

× So in the morning I can make sure what I what task I have to do in the day and I can follow the task and I can be on schedule so that I can do all the important things.

✓ So in the morning I can make sure what tasks I have to do during the day, and I can follow the tasks and stay on schedule so that I can do all the important things.

The phrase 'what I what task' is a repetition error. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context. 'In the day' is better expressed as 'during the day'. 'Be on schedule' is better as 'stay on schedule' for natural phrasing.

× So if someone don't like to make a list for their work then they are they are just lazy and they have like over confidence in their memory that they can do everything.

✓ So if someone doesn't like to make a list for their work, then they are just lazy and have overconfidence in their memory that they can do everything.

The subject 'someone' is singular, so the verb should be 'doesn't' not 'don't'. The phrase 'they are they are' is a repetition error. 'Like over confidence' should be 'overconfidence' as one word without 'like'.

× Right now I am preferring to make a list on the phone, but before I was using the paper the original because I do believe I am old school and I really like that matter.

✓ Right now I prefer to make a list on the phone, but before I used paper originally because I believe I am old school and I really like that method.

The verb 'prefer' is a stative verb and is not usually used in the continuous form 'am preferring'. 'Was using the paper the original' is awkward; 'used paper originally' is clearer. 'That matter' should be 'that method' to correctly refer to the way of doing something.

× so it is easy for me to write everything on in a note so I can make sure I am.

✓ so it is easy for me to write everything in a note so I can make sure I am organized.

The phrase 'write everything on in a note' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' for 'a note'. The sentence ends abruptly; adding 'organized' completes the thought logically.