List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, 'Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping to remember everything. Moreover, I often go with my mother, who helps me buy the items.'

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping to remember everything. Moreover, I often go with my mother, who helps me buy the items.

提案: Your answer conveys the idea but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain reasons clearly. For example, 'Yes, I make a daily task list because it helps me avoid procrastination. As a result, I complete my work on time and feel less stressed.'

例: Yes, I make a daily task list because it helps me avoid procrastination. As a result, I complete my work on time and feel less stressed.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid making strong assumptions like linking disorganization directly to depression without explanation. Instead, say, 'Some people may dislike making lists because they find it tedious or prefer to work spontaneously. However, lists can help improve organisation.'

例: Some people may dislike making lists because they find it tedious or prefer to work spontaneously. However, lists can help improve organisation.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using clearer linking words and correcting tense consistency. For example, 'I prefer making lists on paper because I can stick the paper on my study table. This helps me remember my tasks and achieve my daily goals.'

例: I prefer making lists on paper because I can stick the paper on my study table. This helps me remember my tasks and achieve my daily goals.

× In order to remember all the things to shop, I usually make a list when I go to the shopping Mart.

✓ In order to remember all the things to buy, I usually make a list when I go to the shopping Mart.

The phrase 'things to shop' is incorrect because 'shop' is a verb meaning to go shopping, not something you do to things. The correct preposition and verb combination is 'things to buy' since you buy things when shopping.

× I usually go to the shopping Mart with my mother so that she can accompany me as well and she can also make the buy things for me.

✓ I usually go to the shopping Mart with my mother so that she can accompany me as well and she can also buy things for me.

The phrase 'make the buy things' is incorrect. The verb 'make' is unnecessary here. The correct phrase is 'buy things'. Also, 'the' before 'buy things' is incorrect because 'buy things' is a verb phrase, not a noun requiring an article.

× Being in higher grade, I believe that making list of task in a day is very much better than procrastinating.

✓ Being in a higher grade, I believe that making a list of tasks in a day is much better than procrastinating.

The phrase 'making list of task' is missing articles and plural forms. 'Making a list' requires the article 'a' before 'list'. 'Task' should be plural 'tasks' because it refers to multiple tasks. Also, 'very much better' is better expressed as 'much better'.

× It helps me complete my work on time and makes me stress relieved and help me achieve better.

✓ It helps me complete my work on time, relieves my stress, and helps me achieve better results.

The phrase 'makes me stress relieved' is incorrect. 'Stress relieved' is an adjective phrase but here it needs a verb phrase. The correct expression is 'relieves my stress'. Also, 'help me achieve better' is incomplete; it should specify what is achieved better, e.g., 'better results'. The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'It'.

× In my opinion, I think that some people who don't like making lists is because they are not organized at all which results in depression in longer term.

✓ In my opinion, I think that some people who don't like making lists are not organized at all, which results in depression in the long term.

The subject 'some people' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'in longer term' should be 'in the long term' to use the correct article and adjective form.

× So that is the reason we all should make list.

✓ So that is the reason we all should make lists.

The phrase 'make list' is missing the plural form 'lists' because it refers to making multiple lists. Also, 'So that is the reason' is acceptable but could be improved by adding a comma after 'reason' for clarity.

× I prefer to make a list on a paper because I can stick that paper on my study table so that I can complete all the tasks on time and I could jot down all the things to achieve my goal of that day.

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper because I can stick that paper on my study table so that I can complete all the tasks on time and I can jot down all the things to achieve my goal for that day.

The phrase 'on a paper' is incorrect; 'paper' is an uncountable noun here and does not need an article. Also, 'I could jot down' should be 'I can jot down' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Of that day' is better expressed as 'for that day' to indicate purpose.