List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember what I need to buy. Moreover, it's convenient since I can keep the list on my phone or on paper, making it easy to carry around.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để truyền đạt ý hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I always make lists to organize my work and daily tasks. It works well because it helps me balance my responsibilities and manage my time effectively.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn cho quan điểm của bạn.

例: Some people dislike making lists because of their mindset; they may find it unnecessary or time-consuming. However, with modern technology, it's very convenient to take notes on the phone, which can make list-making easier.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's more convenient and can store a lot of information. Unlike paper, the phone is easy to carry everywhere, so I won't forget my list.

× ... and it also be easy to bring because it can be on a phone or it can be in the paper.

✓ ... and it is also easy to bring because it can be on a phone or it can be on paper.

The original sentence misses the verb 'is' after 'it' which is necessary to form the correct present tense. Also, 'in the paper' should be 'on paper' because we say 'on paper' when referring to something written or printed on paper.

× ... and it's really work because I can maintain their balance in great times.

✓ ... and it really works because I can maintain their balance in great times.

The phrase 'it's really work' is incorrect. The modal verb 'can' is used later, but here the verb 'work' needs to be in the third person singular present tense 'works' to agree with the subject 'it'.

× ... I in the work or in the daily life, I always make a list to manage my work and it's really work because I can maintain their balance in great times.

✓ ... In work or daily life, I always make a list to manage my work and it really works because I can maintain my balance during busy times.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used to refer to the speaker's own balance; it should be 'my'. Also, 'I in the work or in the daily life' is awkward and ungrammatical; it should be 'In work or daily life'. 'Great times' is unclear; 'busy times' or 'hectic times' is more appropriate.

× People don't like making this because it depends on their mindset.

✓ People don't like making lists because it depends on their mindset.

The pronoun 'this' is vague and unclear. It should be replaced with the noun 'lists' to clearly indicate what people don't like making.

× ... and in the technology is modern so we can take a note on the phone too.

✓ ... and technology is modern so we can take notes on the phone too.

The phrase 'in the technology' is incorrect; 'technology' is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the' or 'in'. Also, 'take a note' should be plural 'take notes' to indicate the general action of note-taking.

× ... so on the phone you can bring it along you so you cannot forget it.

✓ ... so on the phone you can bring it along with you so you cannot forget it.

The phrase 'bring it along you' is missing the preposition 'with' to correctly form 'bring it along with you'. This is necessary for correct English idiomatic expression.