List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to make your response more concise and natural by combining ideas smoothly and avoiding repetition. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because my mother taught me it's a good way to remember what to buy and avoid missing anything.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and detailed with good use of examples and linking words. To improve further, try to use a wider range of vocabulary and avoid repeating simple words like 'make' and 'list'.

例: Yes, I often prepare task lists for work as they help me stay organized and focused. For instance, prioritizing tasks enables me to manage my time effectively and ensures I don't overlook important responsibilities. Consequently, this habit significantly boosts my productivity.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid vague terms like 'sharp mind' and 'weak minds'; instead, explain the idea more naturally.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to remember things mentally, while others find lists helpful to keep track of important tasks and avoid forgetting them.

提案: Your answer has good points but is a bit repetitive and contains some grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to connect your reasons smoothly.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because paper lists can be easily lost, torn, or damaged, especially on rainy days.

× Well, this depends on persons who some people have sharp mind and can make a list on their heads and some have weak minds so that they need to keep track of things they need to buy and which are important so they don't forget anything.

✓ Well, this depends on persons; some people have sharp minds and can make a list in their heads, and some have weak minds so that they need to keep track of things they need to buy and which are important so they don't forget anything.

The word 'persons' is plural but used awkwardly; 'some people' is more natural. 'Sharp mind' should be plural 'sharp minds' to agree with 'some people'. Also, 'make a list on their heads' is better as 'make a list in their heads' because the list is in the mind, not physically on the head.

× Well, this depends on persons who some people have sharp mind and can make a list on their heads and some have weak minds so that they need to keep track of things they need to buy and which are important so they don't forget anything.

✓ Well, this depends on persons; some people have sharp minds and can make a list in their heads, and some have weak minds so that they need to keep track of things they need to buy and which are important so they don't forget anything.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'make a list on their heads'. The correct preposition is 'in' because the list is formed mentally inside the head, not physically on the surface.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone as sometimes I can forget my paper somewhere or it it can be torn easily as well as if as well as on rainy days it can melt easily.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone as sometimes I can forget my paper somewhere or it can be torn easily, and also on rainy days it can melt easily.

The sentence has a repeated word 'it it' which is incorrect. Also, the phrase 'as well as if as well as' is redundant and confusing. It should be simplified to 'and also' to improve clarity and correctness.