List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些语法错误，表达不够自然，且句子较长且重复。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和单复数形式，避免冗余。

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me shop more efficiently. I can buy what my family needs and save money by avoiding unnecessary purchases.

提案: 回答中句子连接不够流畅，缺少适当的连接词，且表达有些重复。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并注意语法准确。

例: Yes, I always make a schedule after breakfast. This helps me focus on my tasks and manage my time more efficiently.

提案: 回答内容不够具体，表达混乱且语法错误较多。建议明确表达观点，使用具体理由，并注意句子结构和语法。

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to work spontaneously. They feel that strict plans limit their creativity and flexibility.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达原因，并使用正确的语法。

例: I prefer making lists on paper because writing things down helps me remember them better.

× Yes, I usually make a list when I go to shopping, it makes me more efficient when I shopping and I can buy something the family member need and it can help me to save my money and.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping, it makes me more efficient when I shop and I can buy something the family members need and it can help me save my money.

“go to shopping”中“to”是不必要的，正确表达是“go shopping”。“when I shopping”缺少动词形式，应为“when I shop”。“family member”应为复数形式“family members”，因为指的是多个家庭成员。去掉“help me to save”中的“to”，更符合英语习惯。

× Yes, I usually make a list when I go to shopping, it makes me more efficient when I shopping and I can buy something the family member need and it can help me to save my money and.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping, it makes me more efficient when I shop and I can buy something the family members need and it can help me save my money.

“family member”应使用复数形式“family members”，因为指的是多个家庭成员。

× Yes, I always make a schedule for me after breakfast I will think which work I need to do so I can focus my work and make my time more efficiently.

✓ Yes, I always make a schedule for myself. After breakfast, I think about which work I need to do so I can focus on my work and use my time more efficiently.

“make a schedule for me”应改为“make a schedule for myself”，反身代词使用错误。句子应分开为两句以避免句子结构错误。动词时态应保持一致，使用一般现在时“think”。“focus my work”应为“focus on my work”。“make my time more efficiently”应改为“use my time more efficiently”，因为“make time efficiently”表达不准确。

× Yes, I always make a schedule for me after breakfast I will think which work I need to do so I can focus my work and make my time more efficiently.

✓ Yes, I always make a schedule for myself. After breakfast, I think about which work I need to do so I can focus on my work and use my time more efficiently.

“for me”应使用反身代词“for myself”，因为动作的承受者和执行者是同一人。

× Maybe it depends on others identity. Different people have different plan and their their mind are different. So some people like choose which works they like so they can they will.

✓ Maybe it depends on others' identity. Different people have different plans and their minds are different. So some people like to choose the work they like so they can do it.

“others identity”应为“others' identity”，表示所有格。“different plan”应为复数“different plans”。“their their mind are different”重复且主谓不一致，应为“their minds are different”。“like choose”应为“like to choose”，动词不定式用法。最后一句不完整，补充“do it”使句子完整。

× Maybe it depends on others identity. Different people have different plan and their their mind are different. So some people like choose which works they like so they can they will.

✓ Maybe it depends on others' identity. Different people have different plans and their minds are different. So some people like to choose the work they like so they can do it.

“depends on others identity”中“others”应加所有格“others'”。“like choose”应为“like to choose”，动词后需加不定式。

× Maybe it depends on others identity. Different people have different plan and their their mind are different. So some people like choose which works they like so they can they will.

✓ Maybe it depends on others' identity. Different people have different plans and their minds are different. So some people like to choose the work they like so they can do it.

“plan”应为复数“plans”，“mind”应为复数“minds”，“works”应为单数“work”或复数“works”，但此处更合适用单数“work”表示工作内容。

× I always make a plan on paper so I can remember it because I think write down something in my mind on paper, I will remember this thing.

✓ I always make a plan on paper so I can remember it because I think if I write down something on paper, I will remember it.

“think write down something in my mind on paper”结构混乱，应改为“if I write down something on paper”。“remember this thing”表达不自然，改为“remember it”。