List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'what I have to buy' 대신 'what I need to buy'를 사용하고, 'make the list for shop' 대신 'make a shopping list'라고 표현하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 문장을 간결하게 하여 중복을 피하고, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because I often forget what I need to buy. It helps me stay organized and ensures I don't miss anything important.

提案: 문장이 명확하지 않고 반복이 있습니다. 'before I said'는 불필요하며, 'I really it really helps me focus what I have to do'는 문법적으로 틀렸습니다. 'It really helps me focus on what I have to do'로 수정하고, 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요.

例: Yes, making a plan is very important to me. It really helps me focus on my tasks and manage my time effectively.

提案: 답변이 불명확하고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 'Some people want to start'와 'I'll actually read out plans'는 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 이유를 명확히 하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 설명하세요.

例: Some people don't like making lists because it takes time to write them down. Also, they may prefer to start tasks immediately rather than planning ahead.

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'It's convenience' 대신 'It's convenient'를 사용하고, 문장을 명확하게 구성하세요. 또한, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's convenient and I can check them anywhere. However, sometimes I also use paper if I want to write quickly.

× I often forget things what I have to buy, so I always make the list for shop.

✓ I often forget the things that I have to buy, so I always make a list for shopping.

The pronoun 'what' is incorrectly used; it should be 'that' to introduce a relative clause. Also, 'the list for shop' is incorrect; it should be 'a list for shopping' to express purpose correctly.

× so I always make the list for shop.

✓ so I always make a list for shopping.

The preposition 'for' followed by 'shop' is incorrect; 'shopping' as a gerund is the correct form to indicate the activity.

× Yes, before I said make a plan is a big part of my life.

✓ Yes, I have said before that making a plan is a big part of my life.

The original sentence lacks proper structure and verb forms; 'I have said before that making a plan...' is grammatically correct and clearer.

× I really it really helps me focus what I have to do.

✓ I really think it helps me focus on what I have to do.

The pronoun 'it' is misplaced and the verb 'think' is missing; also, 'focus what' should be 'focus on what' to use the correct preposition.

× I really it really helps me focus what I have to do.

✓ I really think it helps me focus on what I have to do.

The verb 'focus' requires the preposition 'on' before the object; missing 'on' causes incorrect prepositional usage.

× Some people want to start. I'll actually read out plans and some people didn't feel that.

✓ Some people want to start immediately. I'll actually read out plans, but some people don't feel that way.

The pronouns and verb tenses are inconsistent; 'didn't feel that' should be 'don't feel that way' to match present tense and clarity.

× My plan I prefer to write down on my phone.

✓ I prefer to write down my plan on my phone.

The sentence structure is awkward; 'write down my plan on my phone' is the correct order and prepositional usage.

× It's convenience so I can watch it anywhere.

✓ It's convenient, so I can check it anywhere.

'Convenience' is a noun; the adjective 'convenient' should be used here. Also, 'watch it' is incorrect; 'check it' is more appropriate for lists or plans.