List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more concise. For example, say "I make a list when I shop because it helps me stay focused and avoid unnecessary spending."

例: Yes, I make a list when I shop because it helps me stay focused on the products I need and prevents me from spending unnecessarily.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily. For example, say "I always make a list for my work; however, sometimes it doesn't work because my manager assigns unexpected tasks that I must complete within a short time."

例: I always make a list for my work; however, sometimes it doesn't work because my manager assigns unexpected tasks that I must complete within a short time.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Avoid filler words and be specific. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say "Some people dislike making lists because it limits their choices; instead, they prefer to explore different products and compare them."

例: Some people dislike making lists because it limits their choices; instead, they prefer to explore different products and compare them.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more natural expressions and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say "I prefer making lists on my phone because it is reliable and handy, and I always carry my phone with me."

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is reliable and handy, and I always carry my phone with me.

× Yes, I do make a list when I shop because it's very convenient and make me stay focused on the products I need to buy and help me out to not make unnecessary, uh, spent.

✓ Yes, I do make a list when I shop because it's very convenient and makes me stay focused on the products I need to buy and helps me avoid unnecessary spending.

The verbs 'make' and 'help' need to agree with the singular subject 'it' (referring to making a list). Therefore, they should be in third person singular form 'makes' and 'helps'. Also, 'spent' is a noun form used incorrectly here; the correct form is 'spending' as a gerund to indicate the action of spending money.

× However, it does not work sometimes because my manager puts me into very unexpected work that I have to complete it in a span of time.

✓ However, it does not work sometimes because my manager assigns me very unexpected work that I have to complete within a span of time.

The phrase 'puts me into very unexpected work' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'assigns'. Also, 'complete it' is redundant because 'work' is the object; 'it' should be omitted. 'In a span of time' is better expressed as 'within a span of time' to indicate the time frame.

× I believe some people don't make list because it crunches them to buy only a limited, uh, variety of products.

✓ I believe some people don't make lists because it restricts them to buying only a limited variety of products.

The noun 'list' should be plural 'lists' because 'some people' implies multiple individuals each making their own list. The verb 'crunches' is incorrect in this context; 'restricts' better conveys the intended meaning. Also, 'to buy' should be 'to buying' after 'restricts them'.

× However, they want to explore and to understand or probably want to, umm, calculate uh, the differences between the products.

✓ However, they want to explore and understand, or probably want to calculate the differences among the products.

The phrase 'differences between the products' is acceptable, but when referring to more than two items, 'differences among the products' is more appropriate. Also, 'to explore and to understand' can be simplified to 'explore and understand' for better flow.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because you know it is very reliable and as well handy and that will help me out whenever I go out. Phone is the one which you take carry everywhere and every time.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because, you know, it is very reliable and handy, and it helps me whenever I go out. The phone is something you carry everywhere and all the time.

The sentence has pronoun and article issues. 'Phone is the one which you take carry' is incorrect; it should be 'The phone is something you carry'. Also, 'take carry' is redundant; only 'carry' is needed. Adding commas improves readability. 'As well handy' is awkward; 'and handy' is better.