List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ thừa như "uh", "umm" và cố gắng trả lời một cách tự nhiên, mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ được liên kết chặt chẽ.

例: Yes, I always make a list before shopping because it saves time and helps me stick to my budget. For instance, it prevents me from buying unnecessary items, which is very helpful.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "before staying in new day" hay "it will have to remind me with". Cố gắng trình bày ý tưởng một cách logic và cụ thể hơn.

例: Before starting a new day at work, I make a list to organize the tasks I need to complete. This helps me stay focused and manage my time effectively. For example, when I have many assignments, the list reminds me of what I need to do.

提案: Bạn nên tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "brief" và các từ ngữ thừa như "umm". Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu trả lời có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn với các liên từ để làm cho ý tưởng mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous and go with the flow. Following a fixed list can feel restrictive and uncomfortable since it limits their freedom to make decisions. For example, they might find it stressful to stick to a strict plan.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ thừa như "umm", "uh" và nói một cách tự nhiên, rõ ràng hơn. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc tốt hơn với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ được liên kết mạch lạc.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I carry it everywhere. This makes it easy to adjust the list and receive reminders, which helps me stay organized.

× making a list will help me to avoid uh, buying unnecessary items, which it really helps me.

✓ making a list will help me avoid buying unnecessary items, which really helps me.

The verb 'help' is followed by the base form of the verb without 'to' or '-ing' in this context. Also, 'which it really helps me' is redundant; 'which really helps me' is correct.

× Well, actually before staying in new day at work, I will set it to the to the list to organize on the task I need to complete.

✓ Well, actually before starting a new day at work, I will add tasks to the list to organize what I need to complete.

The phrase 'before staying in new day' is incorrect; it should be 'before starting a new day'. Also, 'set it to the to the list' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'add tasks to the list' is correct. 'Organize on the task' should be 'organize what I need to complete'.

× For example, when I have many assignment or many task, it will have to remind me with.

✓ For example, when I have many assignments or many tasks, it will remind me.

The nouns 'assignment' and 'task' should be plural when preceded by 'many'. Also, 'it will have to remind me with' is incorrect; 'it will remind me' is correct.

× Follow a fixed list can be a little bit restricted and uncomfortable since it limits their freedom to make decision.

✓ Following a fixed list can be a little bit restrictive and uncomfortable since it limits their freedom to make decisions.

The verb 'follow' should be in gerund form 'Following' to act as the subject. 'Restricted' should be 'restrictive' to describe the feeling. 'Make decision' should be plural 'make decisions'.

× Follow a fixed list can be a little bit restricted and uncomfortable since it limits their freedom to make decision.

✓ Following a fixed list can be a little bit restrictive and uncomfortable since it limits one's freedom to make decisions.

Using 'their' is less precise here; 'one's' is more appropriate to refer to a general person. Also, 'decision' should be plural 'decisions'.

× I prefer making a list on my phone, you know, because I bring it umm, every, everywhere I go.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone, you know, because I bring it everywhere I go.

After 'prefer', both 'to make' and 'making' are possible, but 'prefer to make' is more formal and appropriate here. Also, 'every, everywhere' is redundant; 'everywhere' alone is correct.

× So it's easier for me to make some adjustment and, uh, maybe I will get updated with umm, any reminders or maybe some reminder from the, from the list.

✓ So it's easier for me to make some adjustments and, uh, maybe I will get updates with any reminders or maybe some reminder from the list.

'Adjustment' should be plural 'adjustments' to match 'some'. 'Get updated with' is better as 'get updates with'. Also, 'the, from the list' has redundant 'the'.