List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên chú ý sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'not to buy useless things' nên là 'to avoid buying unnecessary things'. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể sử dụng thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I always make a detailed list when I shop because it helps me manage my money and avoid buying unnecessary things, especially when I buy food or clothes.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'it's very work well' nên là 'it works very well' và 'learn it very good' nên là 'learn it very well'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể được cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và làm rõ hơn hiệu quả của việc làm danh sách.

例: Yes, I always make a detailed list for my studies, especially when I need to learn difficult subjects like math, because it helps me study more effectively. I think it works very well for me since I have improved a lot recently.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác hơn, ví dụ 'don't want to making lease' nên là 'don't want to make lists'. Câu trả lời cũng nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn bằng cách sử dụng liên từ và cấu trúc câu hợp lý để giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể hơn.

例: I think some people don't like making lists because they feel it limits their freedom. Also, busy individuals may prefer to focus on meeting deadlines rather than following a strict timetable.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng từ ngữ chính xác hơn, ví dụ 'it can notice me' nên là 'it can remind me'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể được mở rộng thêm bằng cách giải thích rõ hơn lợi ích của việc dùng điện thoại để làm danh sách và sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it can remind me of what I need to do next. Also, it helps me manage my time and budget effectively, which is very convenient for me.

× Yes I do, I will make a detailed list so I can manage my money not to buy useless things, especially when I go to buy food or clothes.

✓ Yes, I do. I make a detailed list so I can manage my money and avoid buying useless things, especially when I go to buy food or clothes.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'will' to express a habitual action. Since the question is about a regular habit, the present simple tense should be used instead of 'will'. Also, 'not to buy' is awkward; 'avoid buying' is more natural.

× Yes I do. I always make a detailed list for my study, especially when I need to learn something very hard like math so I can study better. And I think it's very work well with me because I can learn it very good right now.

✓ Yes, I do. I always make a detailed list for my study, especially when I need to learn something very difficult like math so I can study better. And I think it works very well for me because I can learn it very well right now.

The phrase 'very work well with me' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'works very well for me'. Also, 'very hard' should be 'very difficult' when referring to subjects. 'Very good' should be 'very well' as it modifies the verb 'learn'.

× I think they don't want to making lease because they don't want to limit their freedom.

✓ I think they don't want to make lists because they don't want to limit their freedom.

After 'want to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'making lease' seems to be a typo and should be 'make lists'.

× Also with some busy individuals they need to do many works so they will prefer to finish all the deadline then just follow a timetable.

✓ Also, some busy individuals need to do a lot of work, so they prefer to finish all the deadlines rather than just follow a timetable.

'Works' is incorrect in this context; 'work' is an uncountable noun here. 'All the deadline' should be plural 'all the deadlines'. 'Will prefer' is changed to 'prefer' to match the habitual action. 'Then' should be 'rather than' to show contrast.

× I always enjoy making a list on my phone because it can notice me what I need to do next.

✓ I always enjoy making a list on my phone because it can notify me of what I need to do next.

'Notice me' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'notify' and it requires the preposition 'of' before the object.