List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some awkward phrasing. Try to be more concise and use clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and focus on the main benefits of making a list when shopping.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me remember what I need and saves time by keeping me organized and stress-free.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me keep track of all my tasks. At the end of the day, I check the list to see which tasks I have completed and which ones are still pending, ensuring nothing is forgotten.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it boring and believe it wastes time. For example, my coworker avoids making lists since she prefers to rely on her memory instead.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains awkward phrasing. Try to express your preference clearly and use correct grammar. Avoid unnecessary phrases and focus on the main point.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I always carry it with me, making it easy to check and update my notes anytime.

× Yes, I make a list while I go shopping because it helps me to easily learn things and of course it helps me to save time without tension as well as taking any type of stress on my mind.

✓ Yes, I make a list while I go shopping because it helps me to easily remember things and of course it helps me to save time without tension as well as avoid taking any type of stress on my mind.

The phrase 'learn things' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'remember' when referring to recalling items on a list. Also, 'taking any type of stress on my mind' is awkward; 'avoid taking any type of stress on my mind' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes I do because I think that making the list can be very helpful for me to do my all the task and at the end of the day I always check my list what task I have already done and what are left to make sure that nothing should be.

✓ Yes, I do because I think that making a list can be very helpful for me to do all my tasks, and at the end of the day, I always check my list to see which tasks I have already done and which are left to make sure that nothing is missed.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and missing words, causing confusion. 'My all the task' should be 'all my tasks'. The phrase 'check my list what task I have already done and what are left' is incorrect; it should be 'check my list to see which tasks I have already done and which are left'. Also, 'nothing should be' is incomplete; it should be 'nothing is missed' to convey the intended meaning.

× I have seen many people who find making a list quite boring because they think that it is just waste days of time.

✓ I have seen many people who find making a list quite boring because they think that it is just a waste of days' time.

The phrase 'waste days of time' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'a waste of days' time' to indicate that time is being wasted over several days.

× For example, my coworker always avoid making notes list because she think that it just waste her time and she can do by remembering herself about.

✓ For example, my coworker always avoids making notes because she thinks that it just wastes her time and she can remember by herself.

The verbs 'avoid', 'think', and 'waste' need to agree with the third person singular subject 'my coworker'. Therefore, they should be 'avoids', 'thinks', and 'wastes'. Also, 'making notes list' is awkward; 'making notes' is clearer. The phrase 'she can do by remembering herself about' is incorrect; it should be 'she can remember by herself'.

× As we all know that technology has improved so I always like to keep update myself.

✓ As we all know, technology has improved, so I always like to keep myself updated.

The phrase 'keep update myself' is incorrect. The correct form is 'keep myself updated' where 'updated' is the past participle used as an adjective. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× I prefer to make list on not bad, not on paper because I carry my phone everywhere so it becomes very easy for me to take phone and check the notes.

✓ I prefer to make lists on my phone, not on paper, because I carry my phone everywhere, so it becomes very easy for me to take my phone and check the notes.

The phrase 'make list on not bad' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'make lists on my phone'. Also, 'take phone' should be 'take my phone'. Commas are added for better sentence flow.