List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 만들고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적으로 답변을 구성하세요. 예를 들어, 'because' 대신 'so'를 사용하여 이유와 결과를 명확히 표현하세요.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember everything I need. For example, when I visit convenience stores, having a list saves me time and prevents me from forgetting items.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 마지막 문장은 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 주제 문장으로 직접 답변하고, 구체적인 이유와 결과를 연결어로 자연스럽게 설명하세요.

例: Yes, I always make lists for my work, and they help me stay organized. As a graduate student with many tasks daily, lists are practical tools that improve my productivity and reduce stress.

提案: 문법 오류가 많고 내용이 불명확합니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 개인적 성향과 계획 습관의 관계를 설명하세요. 전문 용어는 간단히 설명하거나 피하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous. For example, people who dislike planning may find lists restrictive and prefer to decide things as they go.

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 'profitable'이라는 단어 사용이 부적절합니다. 이유를 명확히 하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변하세요.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is convenient. For example, I can sync my list with apps like Google Calendar, which helps me manage my time more efficiently.

× Yes, I usually make a list for my shopping because it is very easy to buy many things that I plan to do when I did not have list.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list for my shopping because it is very easy to buy many things that I plan to do when I do not have a list.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'did not have' when referring to a habitual or general situation. It should be present tense 'do not have' to match the habitual action. Also, the article 'a' is missing before 'list'.

× when I did not have list

✓ when I did not have a list

The noun 'list' is countable and singular, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× when I go to the any convenience stores

✓ when I go to any convenience stores

The article 'the' should not be used with 'any' in this context. 'Any' already implies an indefinite quantity, so 'the' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× I also make some list to buy to save my time.

✓ I also make some lists to buy to save my time.

The phrase 'make some list' is incorrect because 'list' is countable and should be pluralized as 'lists' when preceded by 'some'. Also, the phrase 'to buy' is awkward here; it would be better to say 'to buy items' or 'to buy things'.

× I also make some list to buy to save my time.

✓ I also make some lists to buy to save my time.

The word 'list' is countable and should be pluralized as 'lists' when used with 'some'.

× As I always make list for my work and it works very amazingly.

✓ I always make a list for my work, and it works very well.

The sentence structure is awkward and incorrect. 'As' is unnecessary here. Also, 'make list' should be 'make a list'. 'Very amazingly' is not a proper adverbial phrase; 'very well' is more appropriate.

× I always make list for my work

✓ I always make a list for my work

The noun 'list' is singular and countable, so it requires the article 'a' before it.

× it works very amazingly

✓ it works very well

'Amazingly' is an adverb but is not appropriate here. 'Works very well' is the correct and natural expression.

× Actually I am a graduate student, I have to do many things in a single day, so the list is very practical for me when I do some paperwork.

✓ Actually, I am a graduate student, and I have to do many things in a single day, so the list is very practical for me when I do paperwork.

The sentence is a run-on and needs proper conjunctions and commas. 'Some paperwork' is better as 'paperwork' since 'paperwork' is uncountable.

× So those things make me very high.

✓ So those things make me very happy.

'High' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is likely 'happy' or 'satisfied'.

× I think some people doesn't like make lists because of their personal characteristics,

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because of their personal characteristics,

'Some people' is plural, so the verb should be 'don't' not 'doesn't'. Also, 'like make lists' should be 'like making lists'.

× some people doesn't like make lists

✓ some people don't like making lists

After 'like', the verb should be in the gerund form '-ing' when expressing preference.

× because for example it can be some MBTI things which means some P people are very insufficient in kind to planning.

✓ because, for example, it can be some MBTI traits which means some P people are not very good at planning.

The phrase 'insufficient in kind to planning' is incorrect and unclear. It should be replaced with a clearer expression such as 'not very good at planning'. Also, 'things' is vague; 'traits' is more appropriate.

× I think some people doesn't like make lists because of their personal characteristics, because for example it can be some MBTI things which means some P people are very insufficient in kind to planning.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because of their personal characteristics; for example, it can be some MBTI traits which means some P people are not very good at planning.

The preposition 'in kind to' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'good at planning'. Also, the sentence needs better punctuation for clarity.

× MMM actually I am prepared to make this with my phone because it is very useful method because we can connect it to the mobile application such as Google Calendar and it makes me more profitable.

✓ MMM, actually I prefer to make lists with my phone because it is a very useful method since we can connect it to mobile applications such as Google Calendar, and it makes me more efficient.

'Prepared to make this' is awkward; 'prefer to make lists' is clearer. 'Profitable' is incorrect in this context; 'efficient' or 'productive' is better. Also, 'the mobile application' should be 'mobile applications' without 'the'.